|Reviews for Of Atoms and Existence|
| Negasi chapter 1 . 1/1
Wow! Love the snappy rhymes here, really feels like it would lend itself well to being performed aloud. Especially love the Reality is keeping actively stanza, and then it just ends so bittersweet. Hope to see more from you in 2018. (I've been a fan this long, I don't plan on stopping anytime soon!) Happy New Year!
| Marina x Machina chapter 1 . 9/23/2017
Pretty neat actually! Rhythm and meter can be a little forced at times but otherwise well done.
| SyzygySoldier chapter 1 . 9/22/2017
This is an interesting piece and I had to read over a few times to wonder at the meaning you are trying to convey. I haven't read too many poems but I haven't seen many like this. Perhaps, it's to suggest that things are not as they appear?
Your fourth and fifth stanzas are especially worthy of analysis. I can't quite decipher what they mean. How I interpret it is that heaven is just a belief in one's mind, and depending on the course life takes, the truth may be discovered. I don't have much of a clue for the fifth stanza.
Nonetheless, I like your style and your rhyming scheme.