Reviews for Yesterday's Toys
Jaya Avendel chapter 1 . 10/21/2017
The last line shows the hesitation and longing in the viewers eyes and soul. I see his/her surprise in the beginning and then their conflicting emotions later on. Nicely done.
J.Kuzzey chapter 1 . 10/20/2017
I like this as a start. Draws you in, has you asking questions. Narration is smooth and engaging. Shorter than what I'm used to but I would come back and read more. I see this is a rewrite, and its well done so I can't even imagine what needed to be fixed.
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