Reviews for A World at War
J.Kuzzey chapter 1 . 10/22
I like that this is one a place other than earth but its very earth-like. Means it won't be hard to get into but there is still a lot of room for you to world build and have fun with it. I can the action working here. Only suggestion would be to work on your structuring. It's very blocky. Each time the speaker changes there should be a new paragraph, it's easier to follow. There were some sentence structure mistakes, too, that would be easily caught with a quick read through.