|Reviews for Bakery Girl and The Green Eyed Boy|
| DPLxBeAsTxSnIpE chapter 1 . 11/6/2017
This one-shot was pretty good. It was cute and fluffy, which I'm already a sucker for despite the fact I write a lot of angst. It was nice and long, and you made sure to include the character's thoughts, which many new authors tend to do.
I did spot one obviously mess up in terms of grammar, and here is the line in particular.
"But I did not, however, melted onto the floor." It's only a small mistake, and very easy to overlook (I'm guilty of that kind of stuff too). If you don't have an editor, I recommend you get one as soon as possible, as they can be your best friends and save you a lot of time.