|Reviews for Revenge|
| J.Kuzzey chapter 1 . 11/12/2017
Very short so I'm guessing this is a prologue?
Otherwise it feels like it doesn't have full closure.
A few grammar mistakes, mainly around capitalization and punctuation. I think there is a concept here that wants to be fleshed out and expanded on. I have nothing but questions - like, who is this gang, why are they obsessed with someone getting good grades, is there more to this then our main character is telling?, etc.
Weird switch of POV here: [I had no reason to live no elders to take care of you...] Was that meant to be "me," or was our main character speaking in an "imagine being in this situation" type of way?
| ooff chapter 1 . 11/11/2017
Weak premise, lack of grammar and punctuation, lack of paragraphs, weak storytelling whose words trip over itself, and lack of character.
It's funny to laugh at though.