|Reviews for decaf lullaby|
| Villager C chapter 1 . 12/17/2017
They say that the moment one falls in love, the entire world stops revolving around them. Instead, it revolves around them and the one they fallen in love with. Actually, they don't say that. They might had, but at this point, I have already bastardized their meaning. I don't know what I'm trying to accomplish with this opening so I'll pretend this paragraph never happened and move on, review game style.
I like your "universe imagery"(?). Its a unique spin on the "forest for the trees imagery" as far as I'm concerned. Your imagery does a good job of selling how deep obsessions can be. We tend to view galaxies as giant entities with sizes we can't possibly fathom after all. As such, your imagery emphasizes how grand of a scale one's obsession with love can be, so it good.
I'm am very drunk on boredom I think. I can't continue. I like the cheekiness of the last stanza. That is all.
| anoddlybluegirl chapter 1 . 11/14/2017
I thought of the title first before I started reading,
then I reach the third and fourth stanzas and it gets me thinking
whether they are related or not.
But really, I just appreciate the truthfulness of a line that got me thinking.
Love the kind-a rhyme going on too!