|Reviews for Just a Guy Trying to Give the Best Speeches|
| CrystalAtlas chapter 1 . 11/16
You've done a really great job, but I did get a little lost in your speech at times. There were a few redundancies. First paragraph, last sentence, I would change the "within" after anyone to "in" in order to balance out the "with" after connected. Also, the first paragraph, the second sentence is a bit long. In writing, it would be referred to as a "run-on sentence", and I was not able to follow what you were trying to say. I think what you are trying to do is great, so don't ever give up! Perhaps you can find an English teacher or a Speech teacher to proofread some of your works.