Reviews for i let the metaphor kill me
steffxnie chapter 1 . 1/4
Nice reference to The Fault In Our Stars. The first stanza is my favourite. It flows quite well and I like the juxtaposition at the end. I think it would read better if you use the written form of numbers but that's my personal preference. There's something about the last word in the last stanza that makes it a little bit out of place. I think it would be much stronger if it's replaced (by 'flee' for example).

Great poem overall. Keep writing :)
Always Good for a Smile chapter 1 . 12/31/2017
This is beautiful! I love The Fault in Our Stars and I loved the sampling of the quote. I feel like this really fits. It's amazing and I loved. Amazing job!