|Reviews for Black Dog|
| W. Monroe chapter 3 . 4/1/2018
"She hadn't know what," you dropped an 'N' off of 'known'
"Huger," okay, the word is alright informally, but it might trip people up. I won't say "Change it!" but the word 'bigger' would probably be better if you don't want to throw people off.
"As fast as possibly could," you need a 'she' between 'as' and 'possibly'
Okay, the story's getting a tad more interesting here. In one single chapter so many new faces appeared but it didn't feel too confusing keeping up with them, and the family politics... why am I getting an Innsmouth feeling to all of this after only three chapters? I really hope I'm wrong, but it really does give the impression... oh well, I'll just have to keep reading, I guess!
Good chapter, I hope it keeps up!
| W. Monroe chapter 2 . 4/1/2018
Other than the fact that the paragraphs seemed a tad too bulky, this chapter really didn't have any issues, so my review is more a place holder than anything else. My apologies, but I really found nothing much of note to mention other than what's already been said.
That doesn't mean the chapter wasn't good, far from it, seeing as it's kept my interest enough to want to keep going. But honesty is supposedly an important thing, so there it is, I guess.
Anyways, keep going! This tale may not be as quick to get moving as some might like, but I have a feeling it's much like a locomotive in that, when it does get moving, it'll plow over anything in its path. At least, that's the feeling I get from it.
| W. Monroe chapter 1 . 3/11/2018
"But well past worrying about the matter," absolutely perfect line, right there. That alone made starting on reading this story worth it.
Okay, an interesting opening chapter, to say the least. I don't really have much to say, no corrections that need to be made or the like. I guess the only thing I should note is that you seem to be using hyphens "-" when you really need dashes (I can't replicate them here, but they're usually two hyphens side by side, then a space. Generally they combine at that point) but that's about it.
I'm actually reminded of Sherlock Holme's "Hound of the Baskervilles" with this, so there's that as well. All in all, a really good opening chapter and it makes me look forward to continue reading the work!
| lirianstar chapter 1 . 3/7/2018
Interesting start, and the gothic theme really gets through!
Who is the mysterious man?
| Rosalie chapter 34 . 3/7/2018
You're an amazing writer. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter!
| MarieKane chapter 1 . 1/12/2018
Very interesting! Like the mystery, it's drawing me in.