|Reviews for Southern Comfort|
| FujoshiAtHeart chapter 8 . 2/11
Okay so I'm really sorry I'm late, I didn't get the email! But I had a feeling you wouldn't leave me hanging for such a long time so I checked. No long paragraph today - just a little 'thank you' is all. It's nice to have some good entertainment every now and then, huh? I don't care how old you are, don't stop writing yet. Well I mean, you can end this story and all. But keep making more! If you have time, of course. I'm rambling now... heh.
| mousegirl05 chapter 16 . 2/9
Oh that last line is straight up priceless... as was Caleb's desperate 'STOP!'. It makes so much sense. T'were it me, I would be more concerned that others might tease that he just went along with the flow with everything, but being 'the man' makes sense for him too. I enjoyed the epilogue and the sort of 'riding off into the sunset' feel it has. Suns are hot and will burn like the devil if you're not careful, but still beautiful, so I always find them fitting ends. I'm rambling. My brain is goo. Back to the boys... I enjoyed it! I love that Caleb got to say something so smart and then so dumb, and I melted a little at the line where he just assumed everyone else was right about jocks being dumb. Some of the most brilliant people I've known were athletes, and man could they put me to shame when push-came-to-cranium-shove.
I look forward to 'someday' when you're bored with all your other brilliant work you think 'huh, I want to go and revisit Josh and Caleb'... and we maybe get a side-story about what it's like for little Leonie who just wants to be like daddy and papa keeps attaching ribbons before taking yet another picture...
| mousegirl05 chapter 15 . 2/7
Heyo! Seems my current pattern is getting to the interwebs for every other post. lol I very much enjoyed how this chapter started. Seeing poor Caleb at the party and seeing Josh's... uninhibited self... was delightful. :) I cheered when roofier got what was coming to him.
Hope you're well!
| Guest chapter 15 . 2/6
Did anyone think to maybe take Josh to the ER? Roofies are no joke!
| FujoshiAtHeart chapter 14 . 1/30
You must have a thing for cliffhangers, huh? It always seems to be that last sentence as well.
I don't particularly have a huge rant to comment about, just some minor things.
First, I'd like to praise this chapter - which is my new personal favorite. It was so. . . What's the word I want? Easy to comprehend? Whatever. Let's go with that. I'm at a supreme absence of words right now.
Anyhow, I feel like this chapter had more charactar arcs than the others. Kinda with Chester, when he said sewing is women's work. It revealed why no one seamed(sewing pun) to know that he sewed.
Josh is my favorite charactar, if you couldn't already tell from my previous sympathetic comments. That bottom scene has me worried. No relationship goes without problems, and if Josh is keeping secrets I'm not sure Caleb is going to be happy about that. I've been making predictions about what's going to happen next, because Caleb was acting a little more. . . Agressive? Well, more so than usual.
I shouldn't be as worried as I am. These are fictional charactars, after all.
Nicely done, like usual.
| mousegirl05 chapter 13 . 1/27
Thanks for the update, failte!
Ditto on steroids for everything you said in the AN about work and sleep (when the hourlies I work with crab about how much overtime they're doing right now, I have to just look at them and smile because I'm thinking "Yeah but your cray-cray schedule ends AND you're getting overtime pay. Come talk to me in June when my schedule is still this cray-cray." First-world-problem woes at their best I suppose...) Regardless! Mush-brain here can't come up with something much better than 'Kawaii! Update soon!', so I'll just steal your example non-comment:
Kawaii! Update soon!
| FujoshiAtHeart chapter 13 . 1/26
This is one of the best wrapups I've seen, even if this isn't a necessarily the end.
So I've got a few things to say about this chapter, so let's start with the charactars.
I particularly loved Josh in this chapter because we got to see a side of him I was waiting for. He knows that Caleb and him might not stay together, which made him more realistic than most romance charactars. Another thing about him that I noticed was he is definitely what I'd consider a good boyfriend. He's learning about baseball because of Caleb, he's giving up money partially because of Caleb, and I find that so cute.
Now, Josh's mother.
Towards the middle of the chapter, when Josh admits to not actually wanting to be a girl, it is revealed that his mother says, only so he can hear, '...I'll probably never get to do this again,'. Was that to imply that he and his mother aren't exactly that close, or that he never tells her anything? Or just simply because he's busy a lot? Sorry, just got a tiny bit confused there.
Charactar development is stunning in this. I can't even express how well these charactars were defined. Now that I'm done ranting about charactars, let me talk/write about the plot.
So the romance aspect in the story was executed really smoothly, and is definitely one of my favorites by far. It doesn't happen very often that someone comes in with a nice romance story AND an actual plot, but you seemed to manage very well.
I like the modeling talks throughout this chapter, and how Caleb and Josh talk about their future. The sarcastic moments make this story, again, very realistic.
| quayjahn chapter 12 . 1/23
I had to think of my friend, who is an androgenic model in Japan, modeling male and female clothes
He's from Sweden and over 25, not a supermodel, he now looks. Nearly the same as 10 years ago.
drag queen, too
Josh really doesn't have to worry that much, but I'm curious about his reaction
| Guest chapter 12 . 1/23
If Josh doesn't listen to their advice and goes through with the treatment, I think Caleb should leave him. Josh seems like an attention whore to me. What's he gonna do when he's too old to model, even as a girl. He/she's gonna be stuck in a life he never wanted and no Caleb. I blame his mother, she seems like the pushy controlling type.
I love your character Jeanette, I hope we get to see more of her. Caleb really needs a girl/friend to talk to right now. But I liked how his friend Darrin tried to get him say those three little words. I would almost prefer them as a couple then Caleb and Josh.
| mousegirl05 chapter 12 . 1/21
Weeeeeelllllll that was a big old bomb of a chapeter, wern't it? (and I don't know how, but I totally didn't get a notification for the last chapter, so when I started reading this one, I was like 'wait... what did I miss?' Luckily that didn't take long to realize so I went back caught myself up.)
Very interested to find out how Josh is going to respond to that last line... hell... interested to find out how he's going to respond to all of his intervention. I greatly appreciated Adam's point of people doling out advice were making money off Josh. Always question conflicts of interest!
Also, I think with these two chapters I have finally gotten the boys' names figured out. :) Cheers!
| FujoshiAtHeart chapter 12 . 1/21
- insert sarcasm here - I really like that little cliffhanger at the end! You gotta keep readers wanting more somehow.
I really don't like this modeling buisiness. It seems so unfair, I can only imagine how bad Josh must feel about it all. I mean, he's lying to Caleb like crazy, AND Caleb says he loves him. That's gotta be incredibly overwhelming.
Anyway, nice chapter!
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/18
I think the term you’re looking for is crawfish. No one I know from Louisiana says crayfish. Other than that good job
| FujoshiAtHeart chapter 11 . 1/17
I'm going to f-ing kill this agent you don't even know. It was the agent wasn't it. They told him to do this. Caleb's pretty smart for telling Josh to wait. Can't wait to see how this plays out...
| mousegirl05 chapter 10 . 1/16
Hellooooooooo! Between sick kitties and the insanity that is January in the health insurance world, I think I missed commenting on at least one chapter. I'm sure you'll forgive me. ;)
I really enjoyed this chapter, even if I must offer an indulging, half-believing smile that the boys have already started to move beyond 'it's just sex'. It's sweet and adorable and makes me happy for them. Apparently they really are an excellent fit for each other. 3 (should be a heart there in case FicPress steals my 'less than' sign...)
I REALLY enjoyed that Caleb thought about what he could do that would make Josh happy to have something to do other than... bedroom athletics. I loved Josh's response to it all and I'm excited to see where things are going from here. (With how their worlds are becoming even more different.)
| mousegirl05 chapter 8 . 1/12
I think Josh's point of irritation was reasonable. I also was a little irked that Caleb didn't listen when Josh repeatedly expressed his desire that Caleb not be present for the shoot. I mean, it's not like they've known each other long (were we up to like ten hours of conscious face-to-face time?). And then I had to remind myself that they're teenage human beings and even adult human beings can be rude. This adult human being included.
Focusing on this chapter, however, while I appreciate that Josh could come out and state that the modeling is about the money (and it's a little heartbreaking to hear the 'I have nothing else' after this), I had a difficult time with his assertion that he has to take care of his whole family. At first, sure. Great. They were poor. Laundromats. Orange Crush. Daddy died. Momma had three kids to take care of. I get it. NOW? Momma (Kathie with a 'K' and an 'ie' - which immediately gave her a douchey-quality for me... I mean I don't go around introducing myself "It's Mandy, not Amanda, with a 'y'." At the time I was giving her the benefit of the doubt) does not appear to be physically unable to work. OLDER sister, seemed to balance on the right end and had the mental capacity to want her brother to have a boyfriend enough to coordinate the first meeting. OLDER brother is at college, presumably with the appropriate mental functioning to care for himself there as well. So as someone who put herself through college, had to pay for a lot of what I had and did in high school (not food or shelter, true), and semi-regularly has needed to help support [working] family members, my question is, why does he STILL feel responsible for them? Why are THEY not busting their butts to take care of THEMSELVES and their family TOGETHER? So while perhaps you were angling for an 'oh poor Josh' emotion, all I'm coming up with is 'Josh's family seems crap and he seems martyr-y stupid'. I won't go all the way to whiny, because he didn't bring it up, and I could see where if he developed this feeling as a ten-year-old it would stick pretty hard, especially if no one else had the presence of mind to address it. So, I lean more towards his family is crap. All three of them. There is the potential that you were going for exactly that, soooooo good job?
To end on a high note: I am very much looking forward to Caleb's cooking.