|Reviews for Winter's Shadow|
| theawesomess1 chapter 2 . 1/18
Minor grammatical errors, but still decent. Good job.
| theawesomess1 chapter 1 . 1/18
Well... the last line reminds me of Snow White, but ok! Will read more!
| Eggo chapter 1 . 1/13
Such an interesting concept of the main character being a sort of villainess, would really like to read more
| Zukafu Chirimoarimoto chapter 1 . 1/13
An intriguing first taste of what's possibly in store...
There is an air of mystery around this Fauna. I honestly can't quite tell if she's supposed to be good, bad or someplace in between. But I think the ambigitity works here. It something to read on and discover.
I also happen to like the way you've shown Fauna's want for a child. It's not like a straight insert from a fairytale story but the bones, for lack of a better word, are sort of there still. It feels more in keeping with the tone you've started with. Long may it continue!
My few quibbles: The first line starts in past tense then shifts to present so that just needs a quick change then it matches the rest again. Also there's a slight repeat that didn't quite appear intentional, "blood and hair and hair as black...". (Oh, and two "was"s in your story synopsis. Easily done, easily fixed) Nothing major though which is good.
All in all, a very nice start I'd say.