Reviews for I'm Okay
DPLxBeAsTxSnIpE chapter 1 . 1/29
Well, time for an honest review.
I get the message here you're trying to get out. Depression sucks and is really difficult to get through I would know since I have been battling it myself for about six years now.
But this isn't about that.
No, it's about the overall structure of your piece of literature.
It's just a giant wall of text, and it makes it difficult to really read without blinking a few times more than necessary. I understand different people use different writing styles, but I would really recommend that you break this enormous tower of words into two or maybe three different paragraphs. If anything, it'll look cleaner.
This is not meant to be a flame, which way too many people have accused these types of reviews to be. This is a fellow author offering advice for the future.
If you have any questions about this review, please don't be afraid to send me a PM
Best regards,
-DPLxBeAsTxSnIpE