|Reviews for Connection Lost|
| C. R. Breakiron chapter 1 . 4/10/2018
I like the concept a lot, but I think ending is a bit too dumbed down. It kinda over explains the point instead of allowing the reader to come to that conclusion by themselves. I can hear my old writing teacher in my head now "show don't tell." I would honestly just leave it at "my parents died in a car crash a year ago." It'd be a more impactful ending that way I think.
| The-Lost-Cat-Of-Forgotten-Gods chapter 1 . 3/28/2018
Reminds me of one of the black mirror episodes, if you know it. It's quite a short story though, and very text-based. You should try writing more strange details in between the spoken lines. Nice concept though!