Reviews for Awaken
I. C. Kyeropas chapter 1 . 4/25/2018
I think the word you're looking for is "haunt." I was all looking forward to finding out how someone's own thoughts could stalk and kill them. You should write that story instead. Hahaha.

Joking aside, I enjoyed this. It's weird how that happens; a story comes to you, not vice versa. At least that's how it feels. This story is all over the place, sometimes rhyming, sometimes not. Sometimes the lines are short, sometimes long. The structure of the poem conveys chaos, which supports the actual text.

I would recommend two things, though. In line 13, "it" should be "they." Also, some phrases are redundant. "Flaring like an ignited fire." "I can't seem to tame it, nor can it be controlled."