|Reviews for Tales of Arillion: Ellie, the mule bred
| Kinola chapter 1 . 6/20/2018
My only critique is to improve the spacing and paragraphing of the. Make the text spread out across the page. Justify it if you have to. I had a bit of trouble reading the whole thing the way it was.
| Ckh chapter 1 . 6/14/2018
Hmmm, though I felt that the beginning was a little rocky, your story slowly drew me in. It has a unique setting I would say, this world steeped in fantasy. I was pleasantly surprised when Ellie's disguise was revealed in the very first chapter. The way you approached it made me think it was going to be revealed much later but no. No dramatic twists, no lying arc. Its just this and I like the upfront nature of it all.
Similarly, while I didn't find the character believable at the start, they gradually grew on me, something I didn't expect. Overall, a well executed first chapter. I think a few exceptionally minor writing mistakes here and there but you can get a specialised beta to look through it for you.