|Reviews for The Chronicles of Denbar: Iris Long|
| Macca chapter 32 . 7/31
I was enjoying your story but it became too difficult to read with the new 'gender neutral' idioms.
Sorry not reading further. I appreciate your attempt to be over the top politically correct, but this doesn't work when it is the written word... maybe just use their names instead...
| WaywardKnight chapter 7 . 7/17
Seven is another good chapter. Got some serious Fire Nation Exiled teacher vibe from the trainer.. If anybody knows what that means. I tip my hat to you.
| WaywardKnight chapter 6 . 7/17
Still chugging on well. The Mentor is perfect in my opinion but thats probably because i too am a grumpy isolationist. Can't wait to see where this goes from here
| WaywardKnight chapter 3 . 7/12
Chapter 3 in the books. I appreciated the world building you did in this chapter without too much exposition. Nice work still.
| WaywardKnight chapter 1 . 7/12
I Like this so far. Chapter one is down and i can see potential in this story. I also like the very subtle cliffhanger at the end.
| WaywardKnight chapter 2 . 7/12
Chapter 2 down and its still intriguing. Especially how you evolved warfare to match your world which is rarely seen in most stories. Good Job so far.
| zanybellecloudo chapter 1 . 5/5
A good first chapter, and yes you can definitely see a lot of work has gone into this. I like that Iris is unusual in both appearance and genetics. An interesting start and it can only get better. Thanks for sharing your work, ZB.