|Reviews for Love, Dad-Screenplay|
| AnnieKayS chapter 1 . 4/27
Hey! Quick read.
This is like a short film of the classic manic pixie dream girl trope. The character Amy just appears and is so interested in getting the male character to open up. That's her purpose; she sees him and desperately wants to help him. Short films don't have to be one scene; if you want to explore these characters and the situations they discuss in the current dialogue, why not just explore their stories with other scenes/flashbacks?
I'd strongly suggest removing the majority, if not all, of your action lines (except the first that explains who the people are and what they are doing), as you have many action lines that are more direction for actors rather than action that needs to be in a spec script.
Also, grammar check needs to be used. Their instead of there, your instead of you're, I see many mistakes. Capitalize the character's name in dialogue as well.
| Super Princess Daisy chapter 1 . 7/11/2018
You could probably enter it in film festival or contest.