|Reviews for Cold Gold|
| Ckh chapter 1 . 6/16
A solid beginning. Everything feels real and tense, the short sentences helping to punctuate the ruthlessly of this world the story is set in. This is really, really good, what a first chapter should be. You even have a nice o' cliffhanger. Nice.
"Even still glare at her" should work better as "Even glare at her". Cut out the still or even. They feel kinda excessive. But thats just my take.
| Kitsune95 chapter 1 . 6/15
This is a great and interesting start!
I would have liked there to have been a bit more world-building, but I also think you did well in introducing the important/relevant parts.
It's also refreshing to read something written in the present tense - I don't find enough of those. I also like how it builds up to this moment where we might learn more about Margaret. And then ends. Great place to end, in my opinion.
Good job :)
| AwkwardJello chapter 1 . 6/11
I really like how suspenseful the ending was and how it leaves the reader on the edge of their seats. I also liked Margaret's show of fearlessness at the beginning of the story when she stood up to the boy. You portrayed it really well! Looking forward to the next chapter:).