Reviews for Don't Sleep
total.boron chapter 1 . 6/13
Awesome concept and nicely executed! Everyone has been at that stage where they're so exhausted they could fall down and sleep anywhere, so it's easy to empathise with the main character and imagine what they're going through. The only typo I spotted was about halfway through in "Your not going to make it" - the "your" should be "you're". Nice dramatic ending, too! I was expecting the main character to make it home and get to the pills, after everything they went through, so it was a twist to find out that they didn't make it (even though they were so close, which just made it even more heart-wrenching!). Nice job, thanks for sharing :)
Kitsune95 chapter 1 . 6/12
I loved the details of this!
"hang[ing] from the hand rail like marionette", how the world distorts with exhaustion and what I imagine is the voice of sleep - you did a great job, in my opinion.
Ckh chapter 1 . 6/12
You did a good job making the panic of the MC seep in. Oof, the MC seems so desperate to resist the lulls of sleep and they gotten so close too. So close but so far...