Reviews for Between Aliens and younger brothers
Guest chapter 5 . 11/3/2018
I enjoyed it Zac
Guest chapter 4 . 11/3/2018
I really enjoyed the cliffhanger.
Guest chapter 3 . 11/3/2018
It's very good.
Anne Messervy chapter 5 . 7/27/2018
Very clever!
katniss15 chapter 5 . 7/26/2018
That is quite good. I loved how Michael fought all the Greys. Lucy's on board? That isn't good. Loved this one and am looking forward to the sequel.
katniss15 chapter 4 . 7/20/2018
This is really good! It is really funny how Ash mistook Michael and Zac for reptilians! You don't need to say anything about how you keep going to do the last chapter, but it gets too long as that is none of the readers concern. And you don't need to apologise for ending the chapters on cliffhangers as that is good because it keeps people reading longer. Yes, I am enjoying your story.
Anne Messervy chapter 3 . 7/18/2018
Well done! Very funny!
katniss15 chapter 3 . 7/17/2018
This is really good! Ash is a bit stupid. Wonder what's going to happen now?
katniss15 chapter 2 . 7/11/2018
That is the best chapter of this story! Action, humour. Looking forward to the next one!
katniss15 chapter 1 . 7/7/2018
A great start to an interesting tale. You left out some words, so it got somewhat confusing, but it is really good. When's the next chapter coming?
Goonipers chapter 1 . 7/7/2018
It was a bit confusing, and he shot them dead instead of injuring them.

You don't need 'he was clearly' twice, you just need to describe what they were wearing.

You also wrote 'Zac officer sighed' and I think you meant 'The officer sighed'. The last big paragraph block at the end was also confusing. You could have broken it up a tad.