Reviews for Michael: Anger Management
Random Hero Fan chapter 12 . 9/8
[The care and concern that she showed this morning have dissipated like this morning's fog.] ~ I love this!

Wow, I'd been wondering what could possibly come between these two, or even how they would go through a breakup if they ever got there. Now I know! Saddens me, but I get it. Poor, poor Michael!

I love this, too! [It's his turn to look aghast. "Everyone deserves good friends, Michael, everyone. Remember that . . . stay strong. We love you!"]

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 11 . 9/8
What a sad chapter! I feel so bad for the poor kid, but he's handling this amazingly well so far. He has no choice, really, but I can still applaud him for it!

[The silence becomes oppressing.] ~ I think you mean "oppressive." :3 Also, "squirrel's" doesn't need an apostrophe.

Hmm, I wonder what's up with Mandy? I can usually glean insinuations from context, but I wasn't sure what Michael meant by this: [I realize a moment too late, she had a different reason in mind for a possible absence today.] What reason did she have in mind?
Random Hero Fan chapter 10 . 9/3
Wow, I cannot believe how real Michael's arrest feels, and this whole scene at the station. It's so scary and awful for him. Nicely written, though!

Constructive bit! It's small. Two words don't seem to be used in the right context. Swath, which means the path someone can take (how can Michael be a path?). And instigated, which means began or incited (how can Michael be began?). Haha, that last one sounds funny! It's how the original sentence was written.

Man, this kid has it rough. He's so sweet and tenderhearted, that it's almost (almost) comical how the authorities are treating him like some hardened criminal. I don't even know how he's going to come back up from this, or how he'll keep his promise to himself. I'm rooting for you, kiddo!
Random Hero Fan chapter 9 . 9/3
Heya, chica!

Loved how Michael reminds himself not to judge a book by its cover, but then says he thinks he's judged the story right. X3 Yes, he has!

Constructive thoughts: Passive voice. It's a curse on us all. Strong in this chapter, though. Sometimes it's easy to fix. For example: [There, nearest the emergency exits, there's a gaggle of about ten people milling about.] The word "there" is used twice to accommodate the passive, and there are two "about"s as well (ending a sentence on a preposition). Instead, try, [A gaggle of people, about ten, mill near the emergency exits.]

Oh no! Blackout! That was terrible! I want to cry, too! Poor Michael. / 3
Random Hero Fan chapter 8 . 8/12
Rowen is so so cute, I love her positive attitude and hippie style!

[holding it over the counter in askance of the scanner.] ~ I'm not sure I understand this sentence. "Askance" means "with an attitude or look of suspicion or disapproval." Just not sure it works in this instance.

Uh, oh. That didn't end well - and it /is/ a cliffie! You meanie! LOL!

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 7 . 8/12
Heya, Dar, I'm back for more.

Wow, I don't think you could have gotten the awkwardness of that particular family dinner more realistic. I still feel bad for Michael, and I'm worried because /he's/ worried.

Nitpick! :3 It's small, I promise. Early on, Michael mentions that his mother is much more conservatively dressed than usual, in comfy pants, a tank top, and loose hair. That seems like a contradiction. "Conservative" means a suit and tie, a pencil skirt and nylons, a clean shave, a bun. "Casual" would be more sweats and undershirt and letting the hair down.

I absolutely loved the description of Mandy all bundled up on the bus. One, it was adorable. Two, I actually /felt/ how cold it was, just from Michael looking at her!

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 6 . 8/4
Ooo, good stuff. I remember reading this a long time ago - maybe when it was still part of the first book? It's gotten stronger in the meantime. I actually don't have anything I want to crit! Michael is plunging headfirst through some tough, tough lessons, and I can tell that if he doesn't slow down and learn something, there will be trouble. On the other hand, poor kid, a lot is hitting him all at once again. Stay strong, Michael!

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 5 . 8/4
I hope this is the right chapter, chica! Let me know if I missed one (besides the one I reviewed through Discord). :3

OMG, haha, Rowen is my kindred spirit, her with that unicorn. Too cute! I'm loving this birthday vibe with her and Michael and Mandy and Corbin. It's nice to see them actually having some real fun.

I suppose the only thing I can find for my "help" section is piddly. The word "towards." It's used a lot in this chapter so I noticed. The American spelling is "toward." No S. Same with "backward" and "forward." Just FYI.

Wow, that confrontation with Cory actually played out fantastically well. I was totally sucked in through all of it - I wanted things to go well, of course, but I understand why Michael reacted the way he did (even if I don't like it! Poor Mandy!). That was awesome! Can't wait to see what's next!

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 3 . 7/19
Ooo, there was some good stuff in this chapter. Some real, down-to-earth conflict that's totally believable. I'm disappointed in Mandy's father (or, at least, how Mandy represents him), though I am not surprised. I would have thought it weird if Michael hadn't gotten angry with her peripherally, though it made me sad. I hope he makes up with her soon! Angelina rocks the Mom-biz.

One small thing, okay? It's "kitty-corner," not "kiddy." :3

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 2 . 7/15
Very positive and upbeat! Fun to read about the gang getting back together. :3 You did say this is hot off the keyboard, so I won't pick on the typos. There aren't many, anyway! You've really captured the feel of back to school, with some friends gone, some allegiance changes, the overall new vs. old. I also noticed that Michael and Mandy and the others actually sound older, which is perfect. Nice work!

~ rhf
Random Hero Fan chapter 1 . 7/15
Heya, lady! Here I am, diving in. ;3

This is so sweet and adorable! I'm happy that Michael seems to have calmed down . . . though with a title like "Anger Management," I know it won't last! Alas!

The one thing that I noticed while reading (and it's a weird thing to notice!) is that the paragraphs seem super short. I know, right? Why am I fretting about paragraph length? It's just, it feels like when there are too many one-line or two-sentence paragraphs, my mind keeps thinking there will be a big change in subject . . . and then there isn't. For example, I feel like all of these thoughts are connected and should be one paragraph, starting with [Glancing at her once more . . .] and ending with [. . . I'm a bit shocked that it isn't the case.] I feel like this fits under the "flow" concern, though it's a mechanical interpretation rather than a plot one.

I absolutely love how Mandy handles Michael, and vice versa. It's clear that they've been friends for a long, long time, and I can only hope their friendship survives another year of school.

~ rhf