|Reviews for Gun Elf|
| jerseydanielgibson chapter 5 . 6/1/2019
I like that you use the concept of modern technology and turn it magical, turning tablets into grimoires, guns into lances and wands, a way that spells work. It shows good creativity and fun!
| jerseydanielgibson chapter 4 . 6/1/2019
Have job, will travel. The gun helps, too.
And like the porridge, the plot thickens with time.
So is Duke the reason Edel can do any magic instead of the Aethernet mentioned in the first chapter? He seems to have a recipe for Kentucky Fried Human, Extra Crispy.
| jerseydanielgibson chapter 3 . 6/1/2019
Interesting question; Edel said that Schmidt was 'an old friend' but then said only a few years prior. For someone who is near a 100 years of age, I don't think someone from three years prior would be considered an 'old friend' based upon a chance meeting. Unless it was Edel just messing with him and being smug.
And for all of the vaultedness of Elves, why would people assume Edel was stealing a car with no body or wheels? Does she get the insurance money back?
| jerseydanielgibson chapter 2 . 6/1/2019
Waitwaitwait, Edel is armed with a TOP-BREAK revolver!? You know those were invented for speed-reloading during the Wild West days, right? The first 'real' gunslingers' weapon as oppose to an object of self-defense or reliability. Fragile, generally had bad range and accuracy (then again, pistols have short range and typically not great accuracy) but their shine was that you could unload and reload all six chambers at once as oppose to the 'Peacemaker' where you had to unload and reload each individual chamber at a time until the invention of the 'gate' (now known as the side-open) revolver in 1903 (and I want to say that it was possibly John Moses Browning, the King of Guns himself, that might have invented the solid frame revolver).
Trayd List - cute, actually.
Surprisingly, the Wild West '.44' was the .44-40 (.44 inches in diameter, 40 grains of powder) and was an interchangable round for both revolver and level-action rifle to meet ammunition concerns of the west so that you didn't have to buy two sets of ammuntion and fumble with them, or risk one set being sold out. The .44-40 cartridge (Winchester Centerfire) was invented by John Moses Browning for the 1873 Winchester Lever-Action (the proclaimed 'Gun That Won The West') and the 1873 Single-Action Army (the 'Peacemaker' being the original .44 that came from the blackpowder revolver days such as the Navy Sixs and the Army Sixs, ball-and-cap revolvers).
I will say this, you certainly have crafted a sort of futurized western. Which tickles me.
| jerseydanielgibson chapter 1 . 6/1/2019
Hmmm, the Aethernet almost sounds like a magical internet with that word useage; futuristic yet magical at the same time, which I like the creativity.
"I have a family!"
"And?" BAM! (I like how you did this. Of course everyone has a family. Especially when looking down the barrel of a .44)
I liked the end where Edelweiss doesn't accept the man's money but his stories instead. A nice touch.
| BradytheJust chapter 9 . 4/30/2019
Aww... that was oddly adorable! :D
Having Edelweiss and Baby bonding over their love of guns was very interesting, and I enjoyed the chapter! :D It did hit me in the feels that the elven woman couldn't have children, especially after seeing how nice she was with Baby. It's an odd relationship, but it works.
Great job and I can't wait to read more!
| BradytheJust chapter 8 . 4/17/2019
Wow! Edelweiss is epic... pistol whipping an orc! That was awesome. As an independent Freelancer myself, I feel what Edelweiss feels about dealing with guilds and organizations, and I really loved her dialogue with the men. I also enjoyed the opening with the tobacco and Edelwiess turning in her bounty.
Amazing job as always and I can wait for more!
| BradytheJust chapter 7 . 4/9/2019
Well, this chapter was just like that trip, worth it for the entertainment value! You described the grave town really well and I enjoyed seeing a town built solely from junk in my mind's eye. The history of the town (being a massive tourist attraction, to a dumping ground, to a criminal haven, to a goblin city) was also extremely interesting.
I loved Fragxxit! :D Goblins are fun to write about aren't they? And his relationship with Baby is really cute and heartwarming. Also, having that description of Edelweiss's gun was really cool as well. I feel like I got to know her a bit better through her weapon. :)
I can't wait to read more!
| BradytheJust chapter 6 . 4/1/2019
Awesome! I really enjoyed the connection between magic and science that your story has. I've seen it go a lot of different ways (Magic is science we don't understand yet, magic and science are two separate entities, magic and science are polar opposites etc) but I've never seen magic evolve into science over time. Having the states of matter get their origins from the four elements is also really cool.
If science could have taught me to be magical, then I think I would have paid more attention in class! :) Great job!
| BradytheJust chapter 5 . 3/18/2019
Wow! The entire case was done really well, and I was hooked until the end. I also really liked the talk about the syndicate screwing themselves over by acting too tough, and they really did. I also smiled a bit when Edelweiss stayed with Borghi, that was oddly heartwarming and I really liked it.
The gunfight scene was extremely well done, and I could visualize the ice arc wand in my mind's eye very well. I've had a lot of trouble writing shootouts in my own books and stories, and this will definitely help me out. I could see the action and it was awesome!
Can't wait for more!
| BradytheJust chapter 4 . 3/13/2019
Ooh, a dwarven dockworker gone missing. Now things are getting interesting! I loved the scene between Edelweiss and Flecther, and her integration methods were very well thought out. Her interaction with the barkeep was also very well written, and it made me smile as she began talking about the fact that she was cheaper (as a Freelancer myself, I've had to make the same case to get hired)
The chapter was a joy to read and I really enjoyed how I could see everything in my head. I also loved the line "It felt good to have an ex-demon on her payroll, even if she didn't pay him anything." At least he's a good car defender!
Great job my friend!
| BradytheJust chapter 2 . 2/27/2019
Another amazing chapter! :D I really love the communication between Edelweiss and Duke, because banter between an elf and a spirit (or any kind of creature and a spirit) is always fun. I loved Duke's opinions on the world, and it reminds me of my life. I love exploration and my family is always "You can search it up on your phone you know?" But there's no substitute for exploration. :)
The descriptions of the city, environments, and characters were all wonderfully done and I'm definitely using some the things I learned from this story in my own works. I'm glad Edelweiss returned home, and I really loved her interaction with Genevieve. A freelance Freelancer... that made me chuckle! _ But I guess they are endangered.
Now I can't wait for more, and I want to know the story behind that ebony pistol!
| BradytheJust chapter 1 . 2/10/2019
Holy crap. This is an amazing story. I've read (and even tried to write) some science fiction/fantasy hybrid tales before, but this one blows everything out of the water. The setting, the technology, even just the premise of an elf using a gun... all of it was incredibly well done. I enjoyed how you showed off all the mercenaries personalities, to the point where I thought they were part of the main character cast... until they died.
The fight scene wasn't only fast paced in my mind, it was also fast-paced in the story. Every word seemed to drip with action, and showed just how resourceful our elven freelancer is. The bit at the end with Edelweiss and the father of the caravan's only victim... that made my heart skip a beat!
Amazing story, amazing job, and I can't wait for more!