I think this chapter came out great and I honestly think you’re doing a great job so far - nothing i would complain about! Sorry I have nothing constructive to say cause I love everything so far, so you do you b!
Side note: I absolutely adore Eleanor!

OMG. It is 3 love stories tied in single story. I love it. Candy coop, jay hope, faith matt. Bring it on.

Not gonna lie I love the nerd and bad boy cliche! (Yours is better written than most tho 3) I agree with the following comment - I think more focus on the side characters would be cool, although it looks like you’re probably building onto that anyway. I’m really looking forward to read the rest! I love the insight into Candace’s shy persona and how she isn’t simply going to let herself be bullied. Eugh I hope she shows Sera who’s boss!
IM SHIPPING CANDY AND COOP
Can’t wait for more xx

Hello again!

You updated fast, yay!

I would suggest inserting line breaks when you shift scenes (such as between Jay's last line and Candy walking out of the school again). Either use line breaks, or have some sort of transition to indicate passage of time to minimize confusion. :)

After reading her interaction with Jay, I realized that most of the story is being centered around Cooper and Candice interactions (a few of Seraphina for plot purposes), but there's virtually no development on her friends and the mention of her crushing on Matthew at the beginning of the story hasn't been resolved. With that being said, I would love to see more scenes with the side characters to see more development(perhaps their reaction to Cooper?)

Until next time!
-MM

Hello!

Just started reading your story today, so I'm going to combine all my comments of all 7 chapters together into one. I've really enjoyed reading your story so far and took a peak at your bio and just wanted you to know that I hope you end up reaching your dream of publishing! :)

I relate so much with the not-being-able-to-see-anything without glasses and I adored the way you described Candice clumsily stumbling into things.

On another note, I'm glad that you clarified whether or not the toilet bowl was clean although I find it hard to believe (or she was really really lucky) that public bathrooms could be clean. And add on the fact Seraphina probably would had purposely found the dirtiest one to get revenge on Candice.

Personally, Seraphina's character seems to be over the top, a little exaggerated for such a simple thing as a car ride, but who really knows what high school girls are really thinking anyways? :)

I hope Candice grows a backbone soon. If she didn't submit to her sister's demand to go to the mall with her, Candice would had never encountered Seraphina and her posse in the first place.

Anyways, I enjoyed the read and keep updating! Until next time!
-MM

I hope she has real good plan. Because she is acting like some drama queen right now. And way too many boys wanting to help. Toilet bowl incident needs a swift comeback but going alone that is seriously stupid...

So candy and coop. Nice pairing...

I absolutely adore Candy. May best man win...