So, I've just read this story up in its entirety for now and I have to say, I thought this was freakin' hilarious and very heartwarming too. I loved all of the characters you've created, Brian and Nikki have to be my personal favorites so far. Bea and Leo are awesome too, but there's something about Brian and Nikki that I love more. I think it's because of Brian and his Scottish voice. Long live the Scottish king, lol! He's great!

My only critique with this story is that there are some elements of telling and not showing. For example, there's one part where it's explained that Nikki is handcuffed to Brian for two weeks at camp. Would've been cool to see that as a flashback or something, but hey, I can't complain too much ;).

I also love how you bicker with your own characters, those moments always get a laugh out of me. Especially when you tell Brian he's not present in most chapters. Come on, you can include him a little more, can't ya? lol.

All in all, I love this story so far and I'm excited to see where this goes. Great work, my friend! See ya soon! :D

~SD321 (SpiderDom321)

Magnificent! :) 3

Bravo baby...bravo. U touched me heart 3

Totally fucking hilarious! Cannot wait for the next one and I'm sure Wee Brian will totally dig his Scottish self! Bravo baby girl! :)

WOW! Totally awesome way to intro everyone! Did not see u as the writer participating in the intro! Very original! Very kool! Cannot wait to get this wild ride started! :) BRAVO!