|Reviews for The Stars|
| Tahayyur Sufi chapter 1 . 8/31/2019
Your poem depicts an unusual yet clever approach to existance. Explaining your points not from your but from a point of view of entities that have watched it all since mankind was born.
However, your main point is not clear in the begining as in first few verses. And you have just mentioned it only in the last verse. Apart from that, the poem lacks rhyme and rythmicity, the verses are very long. For a catchy appearance and approach I would suggest shorter verses with bigger meaning. If not rhyme, then let there be a sense of melody in the least. And try to keep all of your poem together or present it in such a way that all comes to place at the end. But then again, there are no rules.
~goodluck on your journey.