This is for the Review Game: Stories-Easy Fix

I love this guy's sense of humor! You write this lovable miscreant drunk guy so well! He does all of these horrible things, yet I don't want to hate him at all. You also did a really good job with the dialogue. Normally I don't like profanity because I'm trained to see it as a substitute for real words and not something that adds much to dialogue, but the jokes, humor, and wit really shine through in this piece!

You also managed to tell a pretty interesting story using mostly dialogue. Your description of the setting wasn't bad, either. I didn't feel like we were in an empty room or anything. I wish I could take some lessons from you when it comes to good writing!