Oh no! Poor Jason...this chapter made me feel even more sorry for him. The description of their home was very poignant and really revealed the atmosphere that Jason is living in, which is obviously less than ideal.

I loved the moment when he pulled the comic book out of the trash. It highlights how much of a kid he still is, even though he's dealing with so many adult problems. I also enjoyed the flashback—my guess is that maybe his dad is still alive, and he'll be able to be reunited with him. At least I hope so! It's time for this boy to catch a break.

This is a really interesting opening! I'm fascinated by what will be the connection between the man and Ms. Rain, and Jason. I enjoyed the conversation between the man and Ms. Rain and I wonder if this is a world where bugs/animals frequently talk, or maybe if it's a shape-shifter situation? I also liked the introduction of Jason's conflict. You do a good job of showing his angst and anger at his own helplessness. I'm interested to see what will happen next for him.

The only correction I would suggest is that the opening line felt a bit cliche to me. Starting with a description of the weather is a pretty common opening, especially storms.

Otherwise, it was a really intriguing first chapter!

interesting story, the naration feels like a script. easy to read and strong.I think that I will follow this tale.

Good afternoon, I was in the middle of printing my old stories, when I saw this one looking for a review. I wrote on Fictionpress over eleven years ago. From what I remember, a lot of stories, including my own were drenched in grammatical errors. They were exceedingly basic. You, however, have no errors. You had nothing pulling me away from the story. I'm really confused by the existence of the cat-sized wasp thing, but I don't want to question it. I did not read the story description.

Still, the characters introduced are being fleshed out well. The relationship between the man and the wasp, Ms. Rain, is quite weird, but I know you wrote it to be that way. She wants to nuzzle, but he doesn't like it. He wants to pet her, but she doesn't like it. (Or she just doesn't like being petted in the rain)

I was so into the first part of your story that I felt Jason and his situation was overshadowed. I feel like he's the protagonist, and the man is the antagonist so far. I understand Jason has had a hard life. I like the connection you gave between his mother having no medicine and his aunt and uncle having "more than enough".

The one thing I was curious about with Jason was his internal phrase. "Hero... yeah right. In case no one noticed yet, they aren't coming." I wondered what he was talking about. Heroes weren't coming? His aunt and uncle weren't coming? His dad, who is only one person, wasn't coming? His parents, who are both gone, weren't coming? The one that makes the most interesting sense would be that heroes weren't coming. Almost like the world was waiting for some prophesied heroes or heroic group to save them from something... Either way, it did make me ponder.