|Reviews for Some Protection Would Be Nice|
| Guest chapter 10 . 11/18/2019
After finishing this I kind of see what your other reviewer meant about lack of emotion. The fundamentals are there but you need added development/angst. Also I think the plot of this story called for more fleshing out - not the sort of thing that can be conveyed in under 15,000 words.
I did enjoy the writing itself.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2019
I can tell I'll like this just because the characters sound visually realistic.
| Uncle Rupert chapter 2 . 11/14/2019
Ok I am going to put it out there and hope you aren't offended. You write well it makes sense (unlike me epp) but it's so God damn boring. Have him drop the plate in front of the pretty girl and make a tool of himself or something. Its all a little bland. He has Italian nanna why not say he was shipped off to her every summer because his rich parents were to busy to look after him so nanna taught him to cook. Maybe show some either resentment or glee at being part of the family empire. Emotions are a little absent which makes it boring and slow. I need to care about the characters. Happy writing good luck to you