Reviews for Desire
CitrusChickadee chapter 1 . 2/7
Definitely a relatable feeling.
Synthey chapter 1 . 2/7
wow, what a ride! the imagery here is incredible, I love your style!
atalantea chapter 1 . 2/6
I am a fan of freeverse and unconventionally formatted poetry so seeing this was interesting. It felt like a monologue that lead quite smoothly to the last line. Some poems feel jarring but this did not. I love the idea that you never mention the title Desire in the piece! The paving my way back to you line is my fave.
Personally I think the piece could be sharpened/paired down just a bit more but then again that's just me.
Keep writing!
Love,
Ata