Reviews for The Intriguing Chronicles of a Mundane Hobby
CrossPaladin chapter 1 . 2/19/2020
Well, I'm curious to see how this game actually plays. But in terms of formatting, you gotta clear up some of that dialogue. Every new line of dialogue, spoken by a different person, starts its own paragraph. I.E:

"Emma! Why exactly did you have to volunteer me like that?" I inquired nervously, nearly shouting.
(New Paragraph)
"Oh! Sorry, Kyo-chan..."

Other than that, your writing is done fairly well and you've established your major players. I shall keep tabs on this story.