Reviews for The Intriguing Chronicles of a Mundane Hobby |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I'm curious to see how this game actually plays. But in terms of formatting, you gotta clear up some of that dialogue. Every new line of dialogue, spoken by a different person, starts its own paragraph. I.E: "Emma! Why exactly did you have to volunteer me like that?" I inquired nervously, nearly shouting. (New Paragraph) "Oh! Sorry, Kyo-chan..." Other than that, your writing is done fairly well and you've established your major players. I shall keep tabs on this story. |