|Reviews for On A Hill|
| Whirlymerle chapter 1 . 5/4/2020
Hi there! I enjoyed this piece a lot. I thought you struck a wonderfully balanced quiet, slightly melancholy tone that fit the narrator's musings well. The presence of rain both in the scene where the narrator meets the girl and in the dream was a nice touch.
While I definitely thought the dream sequence was interesting, I thought it was a bit too long and not as well ingrained into the rest of your story. Given the first few scenes of your story, the surreal turn at the end was a tad jarring. I do love the ending sentence though!
Thanks for the read!