|Reviews for False Promises|
| J.Kuzzey chapter 3 . 8/21
Overall this was a good chapter. I'm enjoying that there is still a lot of mystery. I think the way Paul reacted was very real. Keep up the good work
| J.Kuzzey chapter 2 . 8/21
I like that you utilized the conversation at the table with his parents to do a bit of world building. It felt pretty natural, like these were questions he would have; the flow of the conversation was good; it added to the story a ton, definitely helped put me in the setting a bit mentally.
| J.Kuzzey chapter 1 . 8/21
Definitely interested in this. I like the premise, there's a lot of intrigue in this first chapter. It's not badly written, everything is easy to follow and you have enough description that I can conjure up a visual in my head. Only feedback would be: remember to use proper punctuation. You have some mistakes (for example, around dialogue tags). Also, speaking of dialogue tags, the repeated use of 'this time the...' was a little hypnotizing.
I'm going to read more, for sure. Very curious about Paul and the history that led the world to this point.