|Reviews for Etherborne: The Cursed City|
| snagginnanahs chapter 4 . 8/26
This is very good. I love the world and characters you've created here. There aren't many things for you to improve, but like all pieces of writing, there are a few. The first issue is some mix-ups with past and present tense, which I suspect is from English not being your first language, since in your profile you mentioned living in Vietnam. Also, there are some sentences that are unnecessarily wordy. I know that is partly your writing style, and I definitely do not want you to go and change that, but some sentences do need to be shortened a bit.
Otherwise, this story is wonderful. Just within the first couple chapters you've made the world and characters so lovable. Keep writing and improving because I know this story will be successful. I can't wait to read more :)
| IanThomas30 chapter 2 . 7/16
This is great!
One thing... make sure to keep your tenses the same the whole time (don't switch between was and is, had and has). Everything else is awesome!