|Reviews for The Last Petal|
| Ckh chapter 1 . 7/17
"time takes all vibrance away" - thats a sick ending line. Be proud of yourself. As for personal critiques:
"over spitting waters" - I think you meant splitting waters instead of spitting water.
"wise and tisking trees" - tisking? I can't seem to find its definition.
The first stanza is effective in setting up the solemn ambiance of the poem. Each line evoked powerful imagery and didn't overstay its welcome.
The second stanza, however, drags on for a little too long, regardless of the vivid imagery. I felt that the sentence structure was overused a tad too much. The following stanzas do make up for it though, with a strong closing finale.
All in all, a solid poem. Thanks for writing.