Apologies it took me this long to check out this story due to being busy due to studies over the past year.

It's interesting to see a different genre from your superhero works as your main characters are interesting as there were plenty of moments that made me chuckle and put a smile on my face.

Excellent start to this story, my friend. I'll be sure to catch up with the next chapters when I get the chance. Keep up the great work with this story!

What a wild end hahaha
I'll admit, I had a lot of fun with the chase sequence between Big Chuck Buck and the gang got some good laughs and I have to appreciate it.
I like this source of conflict for the gang since it puts them into a position where they gotta be on edge because who knows what other secrets could be spilled?
This was a good time and I look forward to more. Nice one.

The Badminton game made for some good fun here that I greatly enjoyed.
And I'm glad that you're asking why Charlotte is the way she is now makes me wonder too and I'm curious to see where the future and past lead for her.
And the ending with the journal was good.
Looking forward to more.

Okay, there is quite a bit to unpack with this one.
Right off the bat, showing off the family dynamics here was a great choice for this chapter and gave me an even better understanding of both Michelle and Gregory than I had before. That was great.
I also greatly appreciate getting to know Dakota and Michelle's parents. I was not expecting things to go the way they did but I'm loving it you were able to show off the way things are for them very well. The potential divorce looming overhead builds a level of intrigue. I also very much appreciate the calm that was presented in their conversation on the rooftop, you did a good job of setting that familiarity and just a good sibling dynamic that felt very real. And the end bit leaving Dakota hanging has me interested in what his deal is and I've already got ideas.
However, I do have one issue with the scene on Michelle's end and that's the fight itself. And not particularly it's contents because I thought that was very well done. The writing around it is what I find a bit of issue with. One thing I've noticed about your writing style is that you tend to use a lot of hyperbole and exaggerated movement to sort of set your tone and for the most part, it does work. However for a scene that's more grounded in reality like this with parents fighting in front of their kids, it feels a bit like the scene is fighting itself in terms of tone if that makes sense? I loved the scene otherwise, but I feel pulling back a bit might help more when you want to do these sorts of things.
However, that's really where my criticism ends because the scene at Gregory's house once again just does a very good job of giving insight on his character and what his upbringing was like in his household. This whole old school deal within a futuristic world has always been intriguing to me since the moment I pointed out his character design. I really wanna see what other struggles his family deals with in a world that's so different from them.

This was some great work and all in all, I feel that this introductory issue has just been strong in terms of character in general. I love it.

Solid chapter.
Michelle's introduction makes for some nice conflict and I'm curious to see where that goes. Good work.

Got quite the colorful cast of characters here, I see. I like it.
So many new names and faces to get to know here and it was a good time.
I can't help but compliment how your writing has changed here in comparison to Night Shadow. You're very good at making the kids kids and not nearly as mature as their counterparts from NS and I appreciate that.

There was some good stuff here. Nice one.

Even more solid introduction to the kids but this time with their civilian lives. I gotta say that this was a good introduction to that and did a good job of establishing them as characters and giving way to each of their personalities. Good stuff there.
From a character design standpoint our good boy Gregory especially interests me.
And hey, the hijinks of it all as well as the chase sequence made for a fun read. Nice one.

A solid start to this story. Right off the bat, you did a good job with presenting the urgency of the situation from the get-go and making these characters interesting.
I'm looking forward to getting to know them.

You nailed it author, I was sucked right after reading the first few paragraphs. You know what, I suggest you join NovelStar's writing competition. A lot of readers will love your work.

First, I apologize for taking SO LONG to review this story since our last talk, work and hobbies have been keeping me real busy. DX Plus, I wanted to read this entire issue before reviewing.

Second, This story is really interesting so far, I definitely like Michelle though I'm sad that not only her parents fight a lot but her bully is a former friend of hers. Speaking of, Charlotte is a great rival so far her huge crush on Gregory and the fact that for some reason she won't explain why she quit being friends with them makes me invested in wanting to know. Vanessa and her pranking inventions seem pretty cool. As for Gregory, I like how he tries to be the voice of reason... only for it to be ignored. XD Though, his father's reasoning for how he wants his kids to focus on the world around them and not focus on current trends and their phones as well as how he and his family dresses is interesting.

I look forward to how the next issue goes.

This was a very interesting chapter. I liked the references, the progression of the plot, and Angus. Angus is cool; I wonder what his deal is? Is he really an alien (glances from side to side)?

I also like Eartha. The fourth wall joke she told about you was pretty good, SD. I liked it :) I'll also be interested to see how her search for a story impacts the plot.

And Michelle has Charlotte and Wendy dolls. That's has...interesting implications. I mean, she clearly had to get the dolls from somewhere. Did she really go out of her way to make dolls of Charlotte and Wendy just to take her anger out on them? Props to her for being dedicated, at least.

Overall, this was good. Great job :)

I have to admit, the idea of having the main character write about her everyday life is an interesting way to handle the exposition. That was something handled really well in this chapter. I liked seeing and meeting the minor characters; they were pretty cool. I am also slowly starting to warm up to Michelle. She is very witty, as shown through her interactions with Tracey and Charlotte. Speaking of those people, they are both really well done plays on the mean girl stereotype. Granted, Charlotte more than Tracey, but still. Seeing Micheel interact with them was interesting.

One thing I have to ask is what point of view is this story being told in? Is it third person limited or third person omniscient? I'm not really sure.

Overall, great job :)

Hmm. This is interesting.

For one thing, I liked the dynamic introduced between Greg, Vanessa, and Michelle, with Michelle being the leader who seems to attract trouble, Vanessa being the one who always goes along with her schemes, and Greg being a sort of scared straight man in all of this. You utilized some good show don't tell in some parts of the chapter, especially with Michelle writing about her brother.

One thing that I think could have been done a little better was introducing us to Susan Armstrong. I think, instead of Vanessa, Greg, and, by extension, the audience taking Michelle's word for it that she did something terrible, we could have seen a flashback that allowed us to see that she did something terrible. It could have been an interesting flashback, I think, as it could have given even more characterization to Susan. As it stands, she just seems like an innocent bystander in this whole thing.

Although, then again, without the flashback, you did a good job of showing that the Pranksters are sort of morally gray. You did leave it up to the audience to determine for themselves whether they were in the right or wrong, which I think was a very good thing. Personally, I think that they are in the wrong, but I think, when more is revealed about them, I am sure that will change.

Wow, was this a long review. I guess this just shows that the chapter made me think. So, overall, you did a good job my friend :)

Alright! Finished reading this story. Got to say; there are a lot in there and it still have the superhero vibe to it. And it got a feel to Into the Spider Verse and Birds of Prey, and teenagers along with a punk street-like style.

OK. In this story, we met Eartha Withers; the mother of Charlotte I'm guessing? What a very compassionate news reporter. Can't she just stick with her job...and at least complain about the news headlines WHEN not on camera?

Speaking of Eartha, I have a theory on who stole Michelle's diary. It must be Eartha as she is looking for something new and she stole that diary to create important events at the school. And in the flashbacks, Charlotte might be having a conflicting relationship with her and must have identified the Ballin' Pranksters immediately when she saw them.

We also see the lives of Michelle, Vanessa and Gregory; Michelle adores her older brother Dakota but worries about her parents splitting up due to their different ideas. I feel like the likely divorce is because of what they want for Michelle. Vanessa...must be kind of secretive to her mother because she doesn't understand why she is making those inventions. And Gregory comes from an old-fashioned world...well, his dad might be true with technology today and maybe his niceness comes from his family.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. Lots of action, drama...I can't put a finger on it, but it has a different tone to the Sensational Night Shadow. The Ballin' Pranksters feel a little more...humorous and colorful. I don't know, but it feels more like crime gangs and vigilantes fighting each other...but yet there is that strange powers so this story is still a superhero-like story.

Can't wait to see the next issue as well as the next issue of Night Shadow!
Keep on rocking!
- Cheah

Oh good lord. This is almost like Diary of a Wimpy Kid, Captain Underpants and Big Nate, but this school - mixed with more dakka, technology and magic - is almost the worse and chaotic! A lot of people trying to show off and the teachers are b***hes towards their students at time or just dragging them in their own doings without asking them first. It's like everyone is in a war against all of them; a free-for-all. At least it makes it entertaining for all of us!

And I'm surprised of how many stereotypical people there are. Most of the girls here are Alpha B***hches to say the least. At least Michelle, Vanessa and Jasmine are some of the nicest girl so far.

This kind of reminds me of All The Light We Cannot See. We sometimes look back at the present and it seems that our heroic trio faced a teen they know. Hopefully she is more civil than her mother.

And poor Gregory being pushed around. I wonder why he hangs around with those two troublesome girls if he wants to stay out of trouble.