Reviews for Mother of Learning: The AU Chapters
kabir0399 chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
What if the lich got caught in the timeloop? Or Zorian's sister?
Or that deadly spider that Zach and Zorian had to get eggs from?
green0photon chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
Ooo! This is fun! Dang, having Akoja in the story would be crazy. Though also a bit more light novel-y in some ways.

One idea you might want to write would be if Kirielle got caught into the loop - I was imagining it as Zorian's soul being loose right as he loops, spending several restarts dead to the world like Zach did, just not knowing about it. So Kirielle would live a month with a comatose Zorian, being left at their home village while his parents leave, where she then loops after that, completely unaware of what happened. Perhaps she tries to discover what happened to Zorian, who then wakes up on his own. (I was considering writing this as a fanfic, but I don't have nearly enough experience to do so.)

I really want to see Kirielle learning magic.

Another idea is Zorian polymorphing as an Aranea. Or perhaps the Cyorian web had just Spear of Resolve survive. Or perhaps just Novelty.

There are a lot of fun things you could do. I wonder if anyone else wrote any good MoL fanfic...
Dunetread chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
This is a very interesting start! Hope to see more!
Berix chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
Welcome back, nobody103!

I can't say that I have any immediate AU ideas, but I'll be sure to drop them over here if I do.

It's good to see MoL on Amazon. Are there any plans for a physical release (or will that presumably be heavily dependent on the sales of the Kindle release)?
Guest chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
I'm looking forward to hearing from you again. my idea for an AU is a female Zach. I think it would be a fantastic romance.
Guest chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
I look forward to seeing more of this AU! Zorian's voicedoesn't quite fit what he was in Ch.4 of the main story, but I'm excited to see where this goes.
lazygrimz chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
I am dreaming right now, shhh I like this dream
rajvir chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
Glad you posted this if only to help other people be more aware of the Amazon Book.

As for the AU itself, it's certainly an interesting idea. I certainly wonder how Akoja would change the early loops while Zorain is still building himself and Zach is in a coma.

The biggest problem is how open she is about it all, it's entirely possible Red Robes will find out and come earlier which could make it a bad ending. Certainly interesting to think about.

Sadly 80% of this chapter is really just the old one, even if it does a good job setting it up, well it'll be interesting to see how it goes and other AU's.
ifridius chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
Nice to see some more chapters of this masterpiece.

I would like to see what would happen if Zorian decided to take one loop off and do "Let’s see what I can get away with/lets show off what I can do" run to freak as many people over as possible.
DDC chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
As a long time fan i'm truly esctatic about the news about the book! as soon as the kickstarter goes live you can count on me! also, fun AU, Akoja certainly would but heads with zorian a lot lol.
Greg Maxwell chapter 1 . 12/1/2021
Wow. Great to see an update and congrats on your book.

you have an idea for an interesting AU, or maybe just a funny one,

Sly connections with other timeloop stories are always fun, but I don't know of any in a compatible fantasy setting!
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