Reviews for The Light of the World
Lisa-Katagiri chapter 1 . 1/8
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glide10001 chapter 30 . 5/19/2024
This chapter gave a lighter side of Harold. He's had some pretty rough going to date. A lot of how I see him is going to depend on whether he keeps his promise and cleans up the porridge pot.
glide10001 chapter 29 . 5/18/2024
I don't mean to beat a dead horse, but this would work really well in first person rather than third. I'm reading it as if it was Cathy's journal even in third person.
glide10001 chapter 28 . 5/16/2024
I enjoyed finding out some about Walter and Marie's history.

Question: Why did you write this in third person rather than first person from Marie's perspective?
glide10001 chapter 27 . 5/13/2024
1. Not Marie's finest hour. I had to double check that she wasn't one of the children when she was complaining so much about handling baggage on the train.
2. Walter came back well from threatening to fight his son. I really liked his admitting to the kids that it was hard for him to trust even God with his family.

I enjoy that your characters have both strengths and weaknesses.
glide10001 chapter 26 . 5/11/2024
Interesting to find out that Cathy has not yet accepted Christ into her heart. That gives me something to look forward to.
glide10001 chapter 25 . 5/9/2024
I'm glad they got through without Harold shooting a hole in the aside of the boat.
glide10001 chapter 24 . 5/5/2024
This was a great "for lack of a nail... a battle was lost" chapter. Also, it ending with Cathy and Stevie asleep on a park bench is a cliffhanger which you haven't done before. Probably your best overall chapter yet.
glide10001 chapter 23 . 5/3/2024
I enjoyed Cathy's reaction to the other girl's fine clothes and shoes. It added a sense of normalcy to her.
glide10001 chapter 21 . 4/30/2024
I liked how the kids from a small island wanted to experience the train. It represented one of the many things in their near future that they have heard of but never experienced.
glide10001 chapter 20 . 4/28/2024
Good description of the harbor. Now, on to Yorkshire.
glide10001 chapter 19 . 4/27/2024
Stevie is an annoying child. But I tend to find kids that age annoying. It's not their fault and you have written him realistically.
glide10001 chapter 18 . 4/22/2024
The close passage with the Europa added excitement. The fact that it was a German ship gave it a little extra oomph.
glide10001 chapter 17 . 4/20/2024
Very nice details on the technical aspects of ocean navigation. You must have experience asea.
glide10001 chapter 16 . 4/18/2024
The line where Stevie responds to Cathy saying "...each much admired spot. Adieu!" with the question "Where's Addoo?" Strikes home to me. When my kids were small, my wife had to take a trip to Seattle. When she told the kids that she was going to Seattle, the youngest asked "Where's Attle?"

I liked the chapter ending with Cathy's epiphany that home is wherever her family is. Great positive ending.

Good chapter.
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