|Reviews for Concentration|
| Scarlett the Defender of Happiness chapter 1 . 9/3/2006
Dude would you like some antidepressants for that emo crap? I honestly dont know what you guys find so depressing about the world...but i guess if i had one of those haircuts i would be depressed too. I suppose the exceedingly tight pants dont help either... Go cut yourself and find out a way to write something worthwhile and not subject the world this shit you call a song. One last thing: Are you really going to commit suicide or is this song a sad little reflection of the try-har clothes you war in a pathetic attempt to copy those real people with real talent whoactually have the right to dress and talk like that because they have real problems...
lots of love, Scarlett
| chainedfreedom chapter 1 . 1/8/2004
have u done music to it?
i'd love to hear this on radio one day.
| leahhlee chapter 1 . 6/5/2003
I love it...
Tiny bit depressing, but very well written...
Could you review me story, "Welcome to the Real World"? cuz you seem brilliant...
| Tykeria chapter 1 . 4/24/2002
Finally someone has put into words wat i ahve felt for years! Someday this song will be on the radio n i hope to hear it...
| lionesspride chapter 1 . 10/8/2001
It's simply terrible when people feel a need to hate themselves, because no matter what, they're worth something to someone. There are other answers to suicide. Always. Too many times, young people let themselves get taken over by opinions of other people and they slip away from their own grasp it seems.
| Aaron Mason chapter 1 . 9/28/2001
I have a question. Did you really feel that way, or did you emulate the feeling? I wrote a song about suicide, and it was called just that ("suicide" that is). My song isn't as in depth as yours is, though, mine talks about other people, not myself.
I am working towards reading all of your songs, I could use a bit of inspiration.
| just silver chapter 1 . 9/23/2001
I've only seen you write one or two non-angsty songs. I'm not asking for rainbows and people randomly bursting into song, but...*sigh* Yeah, I know. It's not your style. Great song anyway.
| Scarlett L. Beckett chapter 1 . 9/3/2001
very very good...can celeste use this (read some of my stories)? she *almost* commints suicide but someone takes care of that for her.
| GuitarPunk chapter 1 . 8/29/2001
that one had good wording, but the last one was worded better i think. i like the last two lines...they really stand out from the whole song in my mind anyway. but this one seems newer...it has something that your earlier songs didn't.
| Mage of the Clouds chapter 1 . 8/28/2001
Dont kill yourself...
| DarkSilencer2 chapter 1 . 8/28/2001
speechless man ...
| Sakura Maxwell1 chapter 1 . 8/27/2001
Omg! I read your review (omg, you reviewed my stuff, thank you! so nice!) so I decided to read your stuff cuz you reviewed mine. This is seriously way better than mine could ever hope to be! Really well written. I love it! You and the song are going in my favorites! Now to read anything else that catches me eye.. ;;
| adfasdf chapter 1 . 8/27/2001
The song radiates a desperate, saddening emotion, well written. Very good. It describes how I feel sometimes...
| Liandra Ice chapter 1 . 8/25/2001
this is reallllyyyy goood man! i wish read more! )
| Hazel N. Mitchell chapter 1 . 8/25/2001
Wow...that's better than "Last Resort"...I can almost hear the music in my head...