This story is so amazing. I love the way that the English teacher tries to continue teaching despite the fact that no one can concentrate. I also like the format and perspective you've written from.

Well done,

-Amy

I -really- liked this story! I love the way you use short, choppy sentences to add to that 'punch to the face' effect that this event had us all. I felt like you really captured that moment, as well as the feeling that sorounds everyone after any tragedy has occured.

"New York .Washington D.C.

.Defense.

Democracy."That part could be the basis of an amazing poem, if you like to write poetry, too.

One thing that I didn't like was all the sentence fragments: I know the effect, but I felt like they were overwhelming at times. I like the short sentences, but try to keep most of them full sentences.

Great work!

This story made me cry. I moved away from America last August and people here (Phillipines) act like we got what we deserved and it makes me feel sick. It just nice to actually read things about the incident by people who were actually effected by 9/11.

this is amazing! im in awe! email me r review me if u wana talk! love and admiration Gretchen45 x

2.5 years later: That was bloody beautiful. Thoughtful, intriguing, inspired. Not a smarmy poem, not a vengeful essay, but a calm and thoughtful bit of prose.

Love it, love the sentiment, love how you expressed it, definitely love Muse.

Muse rocks.

Glad I found this from Quick Picks...

this is an amazing piece- i especially liked the way you portrayed your muse-it adds a touch of solemnity to it. it is a great tribute to the united states' initial general reaction to

9-11. thank you_

thank you.

i live in brooklyn and our school told us nothing.

in the middle of 3rd period, around 10-ish, we hear that a plane crashed into one of the towers. at that point our sci teacher starts telling us about how some little plane crashed into the empire state building in the 50's, so we thought that that's all it was. the shool didnt even want us to know that.

afterwards we were made to stay in homeroom until 2:30 when they'd let us out. we are sitting around, playing charades while my friend is crying in a corner and she wont/cant tell us why (she had been told what had happened because her father works in one of the buildings. thank god he was alright). all she'll say is "i can believe you guys are making jokes. even i'm going around saying "you know, my dad is so oblivious, i bet he doesnt even know what happened.

then i get home and the world falls apart. there's ash and burned papers on my terrace from WTC.

Thank you for writing this.

I know this is long after the fact but that was wonderful. We will not fall. We shall claw at the air in what seems to be feeble attempts but the world, the collective we, will always sink our claws into the inconstant air and climb back into the heights. We will always pull out of the swan dives. We may plummet and we may seem to crash but we will rise again. Out of the ashes comes new life.

This is beautiful!

That was really good. When I first saw that it was written about September 11 I thought it would be about... well, revenge. It seems to be a current trend recently. But this was beautiful. Even if you personally are all for the War against Terrorism, I really like the "...we will not let hatred defeat us." I love this. I'm going to bookmark it.

Beautifully written.

Lovely. I'm so glad you end on a hopeful note; all the emotions that have seemed to arise from this incident are hateful and angry. The dialogue with your muse adds to the non-fiction/essay-ish part of the piece, and I like that because it ... it subtracts from the cold, analytical metaphor, but not in a bad way. "Subtracts" is the wrong word-it *adds*. Thank you, DMP.

Aw...D.M.P., very good! You know...This is all ultimately because of WWII. When [we] joined, not to bragm but we really [kicked butt]...We were sorta feared for agesd afterward, but now that those who feared us are dead, or were too young to remember anything, fear of us is irrelevant. So now those idiots are attacking us and, technically 'the free world'. Very good non-ficcy though. I really liked the way you put it, always wondered what everyone thought personally about it.

Thank you for those thoughts, that was amazing. Many people captured the feelings of a nation, but not all with such eloquence. Beautiful. -