|Reviews for Psychosis|
| AlwaysTheNegativeOptimist chapter 4 . 7/14/2009
Ah! The wolf is so COOL!
| AlwaysTheNegativeOptimist chapter 3 . 7/14/2009
Wow. the wolf sounds so beautiful!
i want a wolf like that.
Er. Kat is starting to annoy me a bit. She's really... yeah.
| AlwaysTheNegativeOptimist chapter 2 . 7/13/2009
I'm almost at a loss for words.
Um, I really wasn't expecting to be so drawn in. Wow. Your writing style is amazingly easy to follow and take in. I mean my mind usually twists wordings and stuff into my own for of writing so I can understand it better but your story it was different. I just took it in and it was wonderful!
I really hope that one day I'll get up to this kind of writing. Mine still needs work.
I could actually imagen reading this as a book...
| BadKittyxxx chapter 1 . 8/4/2008
i know it might be a bit late but could u send me the rest of the chapters for this fic? its really good and i read it all night- if you don't wanna send it to me could you tell me the mirror sights you post it on? and btw i think that Dominic's nickname is adorable and his stubborness is too- tyty if you could send me the rest of the chapters you have done
| X0ImaginaryGirl0X chapter 26 . 8/4/2008
As soon as i read the name Loren i got excited and then when i went on i got sad lol but not for reasons you might expect. 1: my name is Loren, hence the excitement (Childish i know but meh) 2: I'm a girl 3: Loren is Dominick's dad right and he abused Nicky verbally and i think physically yeah? so those last 2 reasons explain the sadness but other then that i loved the chapy. Poor Luce!
| Uke-Mochi chapter 2 . 7/14/2008
At the risk of sounding like a brainless fan-droid, oh. Em. Gee. Wow. I'm seriously in awe of you...
Your characters here are well developed and less than perfect (in that they have flaws like any other normal human being), especially Dominic and Lucian. The plot is entirely believable, despite the fantasy elements, which, by the way, are really cool and, over all, are definitely not like anything else I've ever read, although bits and pieces do remind me of other stories; Dominic reminds me vaguely of Sirius Black because of his looks and his changing-into-wolf and his slightly sour outlook on life, but that happens a lot with characters I really like.
I've also got pair of suggestions for you pertaining to the first chapter...
There's a couple of places where the story shifts from one scene to the next abruptly without a page break to keep it from merging all together and it's kinda confusing for the first paragraph or so.
There's also a part when Jace is fighting Lionelle where you say “Jace slammed against the hard wood floor” but before coming to that part, I was under the impression that they were fighting in an ally way, and later on, you mention Kat and Tye coming out of the shadows from where the street and the ally cross. The wood floor bit is inconsistent with the rest of scene's descriptions, and would either have to be changed or added to in order for it to make sense and flow better (personally, I think it'd be kinda cool if one of the walls flanking the ally fell in some, giving access to the interior where the fight between the Jace and Lionelle migrated to).
I've already read what you have posted here last summer I think... I've been wanting to read it again for awhile now, and I'd really, really like to read the end, please?
| leemya chapter 34 . 10/29/2007
You have a great story here!
Why did Lucian not tell Dominic about Tavores?
| TheBard chapter 31 . 12/22/2006
I've been a long time reader but after an unfortunate computer crash, I lost access to the mailing list. I was wondering if you were still continuing Psychosis. I read everything you had on the site for those on your mailing list but there was a sudden lack of updates and, having been removed from your story for quite some time, I hesitate to ask if you are continuing or if it has been displaced for other projects.
If you are still following through with the project please add my name back onto the mailing list!
I hope to hear from you soon,
| RoadkillRabbit chapter 34 . 6/2/2006
This story is amazing. I get so excited and fangirlish over it. Some parts I do lose a bit of interest in, but I think that's just because I'm impaitent to get to the parts with Dominic and Lucian. I also get the characters a bit mixed up sometimes.
Nicky is too adorible though. I've done fanart, I'd show you, but I don't have a scanner. Hope you don't mind.
This is probably the worst reveiw ever, but do you think you could add me to your mailing list? I would be so crushed if I wasn't able to read the rest of this beautiful story. Email:
Thanks for sharing your writings!
| FieRys0uL chapter 34 . 4/30/2006
Hey, look... i don't really go to fictionpress much but i think your story is really great so... write some more? BTW i think the names are pretty cool. probably no biggie for you but... well, it is for me
| boog chapter 4 . 11/21/2005
oops. make that and i have another thing to say... i love the developing relationship between Lucian and Dominic, they really keeps me wondering what they will do next.
| boog chapter 1 . 11/19/2005
hello, i just wanted to say that your story is absolutely stunning. you have protrayed and reveloped your plot and characters fully and perfectly. i'd really really like to read the rest of the story! i'll give you my email address.. i hope you add me to the mailing list soon.
| orange chapter 34 . 11/12/2005
Hi! I really like your story especially the pacing. The way you draw it out in such a way that unlike other stories your characters really get to know each other better instead of just jumping into each other's arms ) However, from what I have read so far you seem to have a tendency to forget some characters, who seem to be important i.e. Kat, for a while only to have them suddenly show up... I feel that this makes your story less cohesive than desired and makes the flow a bit skewed. Nevertheless it was a wonderful story and I'm really fangirling about lucian and nicky ) They're simply too cute ~_ hope you'd add me in your mailing list soon, my e-mail's
| xanthofile chapter 34 . 10/6/2005
well, i have to admit that i'm seriously dissapointed to see just the 32 chapter up. but if there is some chance that i can read the rest...that would make my day.
i make no false statement when i say that your writing is one of the best on fictionpress. as to getting published, i can see that happening. even as i read through this convoluted story, i thought about that a lot.
you definately have a talent for laying something out, and in such an amazing manner. really...how many characters do you have in this? 7 main ones, and endless amounts of minor characters, as well. each developed enough to carry this story almost by themselves. as someone attempting to better my writing, i'm quite simply beyond words as to that remarkable ability.
so yes, this fic is well worthy of publication, that's for sure. and even if i never get to read the culmination of this, i know that i'll always hold it as something to strive for, in level of achievment.
| empath89 chapter 34 . 4/29/2005
umm...wow. i think that's the most i've read in the span of several hours. maybe it's cuz i luv 'magical' stories...ir maybe cuz it just sounded so interesting...i dunno. i luved it.
now...i know you said that you don't want just praise...so i'll give you a little bit more.
for spelling and grammar...grammer...i dunno...i can't spell for life. one of my biggest problems. i always have my sister proofreading all my work. but! from my limited knowledge...i'd say you've got that down very well. i haven't noticed any big errors. although that could just be me!
as for characters and plot. i think it's great. it's a very odd storyline. (something that draws my attention anywhere) the characters develope well. you don't just make the characters as they are and not develope them. the relationships are also done very well. i like kat and how she influences luce, who by the way is my favorite character. they all have a disturbing past, but deal with it differently. aiden definatelly took me by surprise. not him...really, but more like what connection he has with luce and nicky, which i've hoping will help with their relationship. hopefully they'll get over themselves soon and do something about their emotions! god...men!
what drives me crazy to no end...is the fact that before i read this i had an idea swimming in my head. it was very similra to this...although with the way your's is going i'm happy to say that my end result is most likely gonna be different! and the characters are different, although two of them resemble (sp.?) luce's and nicky's relationship...although i'm not sure if they're gonna be together or not. but i'm a hopeless romantic, so there is a great chance at that. that's another thing that i relationships (romantic) don't take over the story...they're kinda like the opposite of the fights. trust me i wouldn't like reading people constrantly making out...although a little more from luce and nicky would make it much better! *grins innocently*
well...i think that's all i feel the need to say...i'd generally say update soon...but this time i'm gonna say 'can you email the rest to me'. my email is
sry for all mistakes...you already know that i have spelling problems...so, no need to explain that! but i'm seriously (sp.?) in need for more. i really like where this is going, and if any criticisim (sp.?), only constructive, will come up...i'll tell you.