|Reviews for Founder|
| the snow shadow chapter 1 . 8/10/2014
interesting to say the least, if you do make another chapter could you go into why he sees this transformation of mars as bad, i mean i understand with the micro organisms but humanity kinda needs all the room and resource it can get.
and I am detecting possible reference to E. "a princess of mars" aka in the movie "John carter" of a man waking up as well to a group of tall figures and having trouble moving around. if this is the case i would like to know
| Tempoz chapter 1 . 8/25/2005
hm interesting! i agree it needs more explanation and background. good start
| ldsgeek chapter 1 . 2/27/2003
Great story! A new chapter?
| Kate 8 chapter 1 . 4/11/2000
It's a good story..well written, though it needs more explaination
| Me 5 chapter 1 . 4/11/2000
The story has good premise, but could use more character development. The "founder" seemed totally out of character with what had come before, and his reaction at the end seemed out of sync with the rest of the story. Perhaps more insight into John-even a "flashback" or something to explain why he was so upset would go a long way in making this story flow better. It *does* have excellent potential, though.