Reviews for Marriage
The Final Conduit chapter 1 . 6/29/2013
(Holds your shoulder) It's alright to feel that way.
JCPD chapter 1 . 7/7/2005
I was quite impressed by this poem. Not only can i relate to the theme, but the manner in which it was presented (mainly the overall rhythm and the way it started and ended with the same line) was excellent as well.
Korum chapter 1 . 10/4/2003
Sounds like you've been there, or at least watched it happen. I can feel the sadness and hurt in it. Very well written.
Vinsant Firepsyched chapter 1 . 1/1/2002
You have described what many people have seen, It's a shame when a marriage doesn't work. Good Job. *Rubs eye to stop the tears*
Bitterscarlet Yet again chapter 1 . 11/19/2001
Sounds very personal. I loved the line: 'Your action lacks conscience, my words lack depth.'

That could easily develop into a whole other poem despite the fact it fits in so well here. The last two lines are great too. (There's that word again) I just wonder if the start of that last stanza could rhyme better...maybe something like 'Marriage is void of the love once paired'? Does that make sense to you?