The characters need a little work. And the things that happen to them need some thinking out. Though you do it with enough style for it to be bearable.

I loved the list at the beginning. It was a little slow at the beginni gbut the pace picke dup at the end. Kayla seems to be a little Mary Sue thoguh.

That was awesome! Hilarious and well-written, and the ending had just the right tone.

i thought if i went away for a while there would be at least ONE new chapter. you just crushed my dreams. *pout* better get one up soon. *raises wooden spoon* else you shall be beaten!

i love this story. its absolutly brilliant and so funny. please update soon

Excellent intro. I especially like point number 2.
**keeps reading**

Excellent story! I laughed much. _ Please continue soon!

AH! How interesting! :D Update soon! *grin* I want to see what happens!

Whe! Good story, quite funny. We need more humor these days ... "I prefer the term self-preservationist." That's gotta be one of my favorite lines. _ Anyways, not much more I can say except that it's one of my favorites here.

This story is SO great, I'm so glad you're continuing it. I love the rules at the beginning of each chapter, chapter two's were the best, though. I can't help wondering if you're going to make this a Kayla/Ren fic, but somehow I don't think so. Which in itself would be interesting. So rarely do you see a story in which a guy and a girl start out hating eachother, become friends, and then DON'T end up as a couple. I can see that working for this. But you're the author, I'm sure whatever you do will be great. Keep posting!

Now how in the world did the horse get up there? Very nice, snappy reparte and I enjoy her little lapses into Ren-jealousy immensely.

Oh! So what's going to happen now? And inheriting the fireball power. Methinks they had better get him training, and soon.

AN UPDATE! (big gleeful smile) I'm so pleased. I was worried that you had abandoned this story for good, and I was so disappointed, because I really do enjoy this so much more than most of the books I've ever bought. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE keep going with this!

How extremely charming! And, watch out world, you've got some talent. Very evocative, amusing story. I've enjoyed it. so far?

I really like this style you wrote with it was really good, and kinda funny. Keep on going!