Reviews for Trials for Kingdoms Part One: The Princess |
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![]() ![]() i really like how your story flows. you've probably heard it from most of the people who review your story, but thats ok. so i really think you should keep writing! i'll be waiting patienly for your next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Did she just KILL him? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter made me want her to end up with Jak. I dunno there just something wierd and creepy about Rune. Like maybe he's gonna betray the country or something. Dunno. Great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() *melt* I simply LOVE this chapter! M Garvin sounds so dreamy and wonderful! I read this a long time ago before you updated any of it, and when it was only about 9 chapters long. You've done a great job! Keep it coming, I'd LOVE to see you finish this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story. I'd give you constructive criticism like you asked but there's nothing to criticize. Update soon please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh goodness! Find a way to update soon! I need to know what happens next! I can't decide what guy I like best...find a way to update! ~Serena .~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() it seems like xarne is older than amaranthe. is that the way it is? r u going to explain why xarne is not the heir if he is eldest? that's the only part i'm confused with right now. maybe u'll mention it in later chapters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() another chapter excellently written. |
![]() ![]() ![]() well, u have me hooked. impeccable descriptions of settings, actions, and emotions. i love ur style. |
![]() ![]() ![]() suspensful beginning. very creative and i think your ideas for this story r going to be great. now, to find out wat's next! - |
![]() ![]() ![]() GREAT CHAPTER. IS XARNE DEAD? HE CAN'T BE. HE'S ONE OF MY FAVS. WHAT DID BETHINE DO TO HIM, I THOUGHT SHE WAS TRYING TO GET HELP. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like the intrigue in this story, very nice. but plz update soon so i know what the heck is going on! update! now! plz. |
![]() ![]() Hola! Awesome! (as usual) Can't wait for next part! I'm almost done with the first part of your next story too! Expect it by friday! And thank you for thanking me in your Authors note! I'm happy to help! ;-) An impatient Reader |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, sad! Two reasons - I wanted Xarne to be a knight, and I wanted him and Bethine to get together. And she didn't explain much about why he was going? I'm so excited to see more - I hope you have a computer in China. I know there are things called 'internet cafes,' or at least that's why my dad called them, where you can do internet stuff, but I don't know if that will help any. I hope so, but if not, I'll look forward to September. And I'll think of you while I'm in the Philippines in May and June. Good luck, and keep writing! I'm excited to see what's next. Update as soon as you can! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I did notice a few grammatical errors but nothing big, perhaps you should check ur chapters over once in a while for mistake. i think Aramanthe should realize the elfen side is the right side etc. good otherwise |