Reviews for Priora's Apprenticeship
ice flyer chapter 2 . 3/30/2005
i really like your characters and plot and the perspective with which you wrote this. good job!
ghenne04 chapter 6 . 9/18/2004
Interesting story! I just found it and I must say, I really like it! It's very different than a lot of stories I've read on here, so nice job! Keep writing and update soon!
RuathaWehrling chapter 6 . 3/1/2004
I see you've got the same ideas as I do, with respect to readers reviewing BEFORE a new chapter gets posted. :) I sympathize, wholeheartedly. But consider THIS a review, and write me a new chapter!
I'm not sure that I'd have trusted this sword, myself, but maybe that's just me being cynical. I AM amused by its/her behavior towards K. :) Very entertaining! I'll be interested to see why it/she was locked up in the first place...
See ya!
RuathaWehrling chapter 5 . 3/1/2004
"Oh, this is going to be great! I can use this!" HAHAHAHHAHAHAHA! That's AWESOME! I really like how Kruril and Priora (P & K) are shaping up, as characters.
Very interesting chapter. One question, though. If P & K have never been humans before, and don't know very much about them, doesn't it seem a bit unusual for them to be able to walk around and so forth without trouble. I would think that if I turned into a dragon, my balance would be all screwed up, and I'd be banging my tail against everything in sight. Wouldn't P & K have similar frustrations, at first?
RuathaWehrling chapter 4 . 3/1/2004
Argh! I hate computers. They take FOREVER! Thus, I'm reading more of your sotry...
EEsh. I repeat the comment about fictionpress and web tags... Please fix!
HAHA! I've finally found your first real grammar error! HA! :) Ok, so I got too much pleasure out of that... First line: "...she paced back and forth in front of Kruril and I." 'I' should be 'me'. I know, it goes against all your 6th grade grammar class teachings, but look at it this way: "...she paced back and forth in front of I." No. That's wrong. It's 'me', right? So it's 'me' once you add Kruril's name back in, too.
Also, it's be good if you'd leave in their "aliases" for at least part of this chapter. Give us more time to associate the old names with the new. Maybe something like "Larnesla - or, Kate, I guess - however, was plainly amused." Things like that, to help us out, at least once for each new name in this chapter, please. Besides, think how confused Priora would be by it - you ARE talking in HER voice, after all.
EEsh. All their new names start the same... This is rather confusing. I'm hoping you have a reason for this...
I like how you blended in the new knowledge about shifters. Very clean.
Thanks again!
RuathaWehrling chapter 3 . 3/1/2004
Yea! Plot! :-)
Ok, I really DO need to get some work done this afternoon, so I'm going to stop reading for now. But you'd better keep writing! OR ELSE! :)
RuathaWehrling chapter 2 . 3/1/2004
Wow. Ok, you need to reformat this. The html tags got all screwed up and it's REALLY hard to read (at least, on MY computer).
The story, however, is excellent. :) I like Larnesla! She's awesome. Actually, all your characters are well-developed. Good job!
RuathaWehrling chapter 1 . 3/1/2004
This is awesome! :) I love dragons!
One point of confusion, though. In the part: "Her voice was not what I had expected. It was bright, and cheerful, and young. I couldn't understand why she sounded young, since the present Dragonmage had held that position since the king had taken the throne, and he was an old, wrinkled lizard with hardly any fire left..." It's confusing! You're talking about "her" (the dragonmage) and "him" (the old - but present - dragonmage). I don't understand. Is this just a typo, or are you really talking about two different dragons? Either way, you should rephrase it so it's clearer.
Other than that, I've found NO mistakes. And, bear in mind, I'm a horrible grammar freak, so that's quite an accomplishment. Oh. The intro paragraph is in present tense, while the rest is in past tense. I assume you're aware of that, and that it's by design?
Well done! I'll make sure to keep reading this one. Thanks! :)
Crauth chapter 6 . 12/12/2003
I just love Kruril! He's just so cute and cuddly, of course, he being very affable and such, how could anyone dislike him, let alone hate? Priora is okay, I guess, but Kruril still is my favourite :). Why is Glymere is nasty to him anyway? She/It does remind me of Need, but Need really had nothing against guys.
Kyle H chapter 1 . 9/20/2003
I liked the story caitlin, I finally found one of your storys it was good
Fans'R Us chapter 6 . 2/19/2003
Yay! I read chapter 6. Don't demand reviews like all those other writers out there. Your storie's good enough that people will review it ..
Ash The Former Goddess chapter 6 . 1/19/2003
Heh... A male bashing sword. What more could you ask for? This is great, keep writing it, please?
danilion chapter 6 . 12/21/2002
Your story is absolutely gripping... I almost wish you had already finished writing it!

Priora and Kruril are really sweetnatured characters, but they seem to have only one distinguishing characteristic - Priora is the passive hardworker, and Kruril is the cheery best friend. It would be great to have a bit more insight on their nature and feelings, and also something more about Kayltar.

Maybe you could include some background regarding the dragons... if it weren't for the flying lessons, the characters could just as easily be humans!

The suspense is being built up fantastically though - the previous chapters all hint at something big coming up, and I just can't wait to find out what it is! :)
Fans'R Us chapter 3 . 3/29/2002
I guess Priora is in big trouble. Caitlin guess what? It's me but only different. I changed my name to... you guessed it. I'm the one and only. I hope you put your fourth chapter up soon. You've got lots of angry fans. J/K, but it is good and I want to know more.
KurroNeko-Yasha chapter 1 . 3/14/2002
I decide to review your stories after i read them because you were so nice and reviewed mine. Thank you and your story is great! Keep up the good work!
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