I really like this story a lot. I was disappointed to see that I read through it so quickly, and there were no more chapters left to read! I will be sure to return when you have updated this. I can't wait to see how Toriko deals with this *gift* of hers. In other words, keep writing please. _

yay! nother chap. . . nice. . . Lot's of characters too, that's cool. I'm noticing alot of foreshadowing? i think? hmmmmmmm? _

to tell you the truth, i'm a little confused over the last part, who saved who? btw nice work on your story.

another great chapter! it's really nice of you to actually email me in response to my questions and comments. hehe "abayo, gaijin" the way you define it makes it sound hilarious. hehe. in a good way. i'm sorry if you didn't mean for this story to be funny or anything. well as always..can't wait for more!

Hmm...the bit about Akika's novel seems opportunistically thrown in...It might not seem so arbitrary if it was mentioned in mom's exposition earlier in the story.

Description and flow get really good toward the end of this chapter.

I'm glued! Keep writing! O.O

hey! I like this, you should uh, i dunno, maybe churn out some more chapters. . . hint hint. hehe, ne way, keep it up!

ahhh poor poor toriko! i hope this scott dude doesn't wreck her life too much! can't wait for more! i'll be stalking you..or rather..your story! buh bye for now!

hmmm...this is really interesting! and why is this scott dude's deal? can't wait for more!

i agree with gloveblade about the switching part, but i have to say that this is very well written. keep it up.

You start off with a diary entry then move into dialog. You keep going back and forth and I can't decide if it's first person limited or journal format. Why not define the switches better by having diary entries in italics and dialog/action in third person view. You expressed the staleness of the routine morning very well, and I know it'll enhance the events coming up. I like your interaction, as well.

Can't wait to see the next chapter and rest.