Great story!The story was right from the beginning... it was a beautiful one but with such a sad ending.I love it, you made a good job with this. Thanks for sharing the story with us! :D

Oh my, oh my...I think i cried a bucketful of tears at that.

The story...i wouldn't say that i was an enjoyable read, but i must say that the ending couldn't have been better.

The reason i feel that i've been so affected by this story is not because i'm a hopeless romantic (though it DID contribute a little in it...) but by the fact that it was so...real.

I loved the fact that you didn't romanticize it, like maybe Alesso didn't return back to the whore trade after Raimon left for the monastry because he loved him too much to sell his body to another, but instead, he had to give in to the greater powers of society and went back to his childhood trade to survive. There are many more aspects to the story which moved me and made me cry, but i think that the best part of it was the realisticness of it.

Also, what could have the story been if not for your writing? At the last part of the story, where Raimon wrote of his final months with Alesso, you made us overjoyed at their happiness, but also aware that it was not going to last longer. But you kept us clasping our hands and not wanting the knife to drop until the last moment when it did, you totally changed the knife into a noose, with Alesso dying in place of Raimon.

I loved your story, and i hate to dissect this story more. It speaks for itself, and i will always remember it.

Now...for another story! Fabrizio's Story!

wow. this was just amazing. your characters were so real, and the ending was just so... bleak. i absolutely loved this story.

: )

DH

This was a wonderful story. Very tragic. Reminds me somehow of Shakespeare with less poetry, more slash, and not nearly as dryly exhausting. So, in other words, it doesn't remind me of Shakespeare at all, but at this ungodly hour (which happens to be 10:41 pm, 41 minutes past my bedtime on Christmas Eve), I am unable to think of a proper allusion. I won't try, don't worry.

I think you should have set this story in an all-out fantasy world, perhaps with a religion similar but not quite the same as Christianity. The kind-of-but-not-really historical fiction is a little-how shall I say it?-ugh, this is going to sound really demeaning, but don't take it that way: it seems a little half-assed. Keep in mind, I mean that with every good feeling I have. It's just that, with a story like this, I think you should take the all-or-nothing approach.

But, whatever, I don't know why I'm knitpicking, because it really didn't bother me, or detract from the actual story at all. And that was the -only- thing that didn't quite sit right.

So, back on track, I am really impressed with this story. You did a great job handling what could have been soap-opera type situations; you strayed just close enough to the annoying my-past-is-so-awful-feel-sorry-for-me effect, without venturing into it; and you brought to life a romance between two characters that might not have been likeable if you had been an immature writer. Because of all that, I applaud you. Such is a rarity on this site, and it's refreshing.

wow...this was such a deep and moving story...very well done!

I'm rendered speechless by the absolute power of this story...I don't know what else to say except that it was beautiful, even in the deep sadness of it's ending.

I just wanted to say that this is really a wonderful story; beautifully written. It... It renders me speechless, it really does. I love it. Thank you so much for putting it up somewhere for people to read.

It's so beautiful.

Spectacular. It has all the components of an enjoyable story. I love your style and powerful word choice. The plot was enganging and bitter sweet. I even let out a few tears! The whole thing flowed like an aged melody and the characters were well written.

Looking forward to more of your work.

That was so heartbreaking. You are so brilliant. *sobs*

*wipes away tears* Not Alesso! *wails* So well written...so depresingPOOFtoodlesTJword up.

*is somewhere between squeeing and crying*POOFtoodlesTJword up.

*cheers* Love- 1Church- 0POOFtoodlesTJword up.

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*smacks Luis* Damn whales, now I know why we're out to make them extinct. *growls* Not real whales though...only Luis type whales. I love real whales!POOFtoodlesTJword up.

*is still screaming the NO from last review*POOFtoodlesTJword up.