|Reviews for The Beginning|
| Andrew LaVey chapter 1 . 4/16/2005
A bit unbelievable. I think a little more effort could be put into making it more realistic. What five year-old learns how to thieve and survive on his own? Some parts are too brief, some are too detailed. At points it lapses into 'then... and then... he then...', so you could try to vary the language a bit more.
By the way, 'infatuated' means 'caused to fall in love' or 'in love'. Not what I think you meant, 'infuriated'?
| An Inside Joke chapter 1 . 8/26/2003
I think it'll be interesting to see Chris use the technology he has with him (like his bike) in the new place he's in. Good start.
| Liz chapter 1 . 9/3/2000
I loved it! It was sooo weird. (I ment that in a good weird, way)! Can't wait to here more! See ya.
| phoenixfireball chapter 1 . 9/2/2000
Your descriptions are done very well. I like how you put it together and I like how it all started. A very good start. Wonderful piece..tell me when you put up the finished product.
| Steve chapter 1 . 9/2/2000
Hurry up and write the next chapter/part/whatever youre calling it, this is gettin good.