This story was actually rather good.
It was entertaining and interesting.
I hope you do write a sequel.
Have you thought of getting this published?

Oh my.

I probably shouldn't but I kind of like the way she reacts to using her magic to much.

Why are there so many unnecessary ps in your story?

This story is rather amusing.
I intend to tell my sisters about it.

I'm usually a fan of all things strange, but this just didn't do it for me. I'm sorry, and I don't mean to sound mean or anything, but I am not inclined to move on to the next chapter at all.

The story itself is an interesting idea, at least, the bit of the story that I've read. The writing, though, and the lack of sentence structure I don't think I can deal with. There's too much that forces me to stop and mentally correct; I can't get into the story at all.

Again, try not to see this as a scathing "you're awful" review, because that is not what is intended at all.

Happy writing

hello,

the story is so GREAT!

I love everything in it: the charactors, writing style, the comedy. I love comedy! And I love heroine!

Thanks for writing the excellent story. I enjoyed reading it.

Good luck with more stories.

Thanks,

KaronePrincess

i LOVE THIS STORY. ;) it made me happy and daydreamy...

This story is halrious!

wow i jus finished reading this story and its really good! *thumbs up* good joB done! hahah kai is so cute i wish i had a lil brother like that cept less clingy _i hope that one day u'll end up making a sequel

awsome :)

After spending half a year trying to find this story again. I finally found it, and I still think it's awesome! Now, off to read your other story thingies.

_ it's pure kawaiines! oh i so love kai! he's mine! so back of! puppy dog eyes! your story is pure kawainess!

wahahahahahahahahaha!
this story is so funny!
wahahahahahahaha!
wait.. why is it finished already? why?
noh...!
this cannot be..
this cannot be...
*pout*pout*
anyway..
ahmm.. funny story..

Ah, what a wonderfully charming story...And I had predicted that Essylit and Calvin would fall in love, and they did. Which made me smile, because, well, I'm a sap. Essylit was a very charming and boisterous heroine. Though, I thought the plot was a tad weak, and perhaps there could've been more chapters/episodes to develop the story better and to have more character development. But that's alright. William was actually my favorite character, just because he was a lovable fatherly mentor type. Kai is adorable, and Calvin made me laugh. Overall, I'd say that the humor of the story is what made me like it so much. In short, it's bloody damn good!
-Cheetah Smith