|Reviews for death|
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/18/2007
That's amazing. The line "the song is over" is an incredibly powerful metaphor.
"A wave of shocking silence
carries me away"
It's wonderful, dark and descriptive. I don't know what else to say. You've perfectly captured something as complex as death in seventeen syllables. Keep writing!
| Morwain chapter 1 . 5/3/2006
short and too the point but not lacking the nessacery desprictions
| Aquafied chapter 1 . 4/30/2006
depressing reallybut i am addicted to this
(hah. if i tried to speak to you in german, you would be crying out of laughter
really now, no need to have a mess up over that. gaga, crazy, whatever. just made me laugh)
| Kusje chapter 1 . 4/30/2006
Mm. I love the haiku's. I wrote like 1 Haiku, and it sucked..
| boys kiss girls chapter 1 . 4/29/2006
| SinCorazon chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
"a wave of shocking silence" - that's exactly what I feel when I hear about someone I know who's died.
| Loup17 chapter 1 . 4/11/2005
most people i know can't write a haiku to save their life, at least not a good one, yet you manage to pull it off
PS that is DARK, next time capitilize the summary
| godawful teen-angst poetry chapter 1 . 1/15/2004
Ugh, this hits close to home...sorry, this is a bit hard for me to review. You've perfectly captured the essence of death...grief...sorry. This is...you're amazing. Sorry if this review makes little sense.
| Tatterdemalion chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
So simple to see what you mean, yet very moving all the same...
| Indecisive chapter 1 . 11/9/2003
Simple, but i guess very realistic! good on you!
| Emi Amara chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
it makes me picture just a silent crowd. i'm wrong, aren't i? o well, better luck next time! good haiku!
| agny chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
You're a goth, aren't you?
| frugale chapter 1 . 11/7/2003
| Sun Chime chapter 1 . 8/9/2003
That's a really strange way of dying. Mystifying images form in your head. Beautiful.
| greenfroggies chapter 1 . 7/8/2003
WOW...and, um...more WOW!
i love this, would you mind if i printed it out (with your name on of course) to stick on my bedroom wall?